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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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I am traced Smeared outline of what I use to be, this life has taken a turn I could have never foreseen My skin tingles with anticipation of touch that never materialized Transparent, a shadow of intention never quenched I am lost in a world of invisible need I miss you My memory now serves as a taunting reminder Of what has gone, a haunting detail tangible only in tears Bleeding the sweet, screaming obscenities for its sacrifice It shouldn’t have been like this I believed In something, that is just beyond my recognition Knowing once it was identifiable, yet never real Wanting it enough to think I could make it touchable, painless It could have been so much more I ache For a viable solution, a counter offer to misery An alternative to this hopeless destiny A world with the you I love, a world in which no one leaves, lies, pretends or dies. It would have been everything. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Susan~ The poignancy of your penning causes the eyes to mist~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
So good to read you but oh so sad a write. If you ever find that world, could you buy a one-way ticket for me too?  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yes... it would have been. *sad smile* This beautiful write aches.... |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
a most fine 'write'! [very real, emotive...powerful!] sustained applause!! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
am lost in a world of invisible need~~~ sighing the feeling M |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all for the very nice replies... I haven't posted in a long, long time and didn't expect a reply at all just wanted it posted somewhere...  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Susan, I have been in that place, but never could I have expressed those feelings as vividly and emotively as you have just done. Giving you a loving, compassionate hug, Linda |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I would read you anytime and where ever you would post. This is truly one of your best ever gal. Poignant and tender this is. Lovely work lady.
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*touching the screen* |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
A sad write Susan, this line explained it all to me and with it I could connect. I ache For a viable solution, a counter offer to misery We all know the pain, life is the giver and taker of so much and it is out of our hands my friend. Love is out there and just waiting to be taken, have a wonderful day and take care. Rick |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
*smile* gosh, I have missed you guys. Thank you. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I loved reading this out loud. You wrapped me around your thoughts - and I want what you write. Alison |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
There is so much ache and emotion penned throughout this Susan ... I loved how you wove the reader through these feelings. Really well done, much enjoyed. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Winter Butterfly Member
since 2007-02-03
Posts 61The hidden path beyond the ivy gate. |
My heart is broken with the sadness of memory whispered in your words. simply beautiful. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Today I take this piece (and flowers) to the grave of one that would have been 17 years old tomorrow. I tried to write this from my daughters point of view... Thank you for all the wonderfully kind replies. RIP Chelsea, "the baby" "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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