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Saturday Morning |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Saturday Morning i read poetry in the car it’s hot today the dogs are breathing down my neck begging for one more cookie maybe two and people stop to pet them and say how cute they are they eat it up i smile proud of them but wanting to get back to the book in my hands as I wait in the grocery store parking lot for my mother she buys fruits and vegetables candy bars tucked among the cucumbers i pretend not to see them as I load her groceries listening to her with one ear and thinking of the words i have read thinking that dreams are simply one’s future reality i pet the dogs panting down my neck they beg for just one more cookie – well, maybe two and i drive home thinking of poetry --- Alison [This message has been edited by aziza (07-07-2007 11:46 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Allison, you painted a mode and a scene very well within this poem, I envy the dogs...and I snitched the candy bar. (smile) Nice write! |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
I love the scene you set. It felt like a poetic narrative of a movie |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
I enjoy reading 'realism'/"slice of life" writes. [something I have never been able to do!] Applause! |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Alison, this is the writing of realism and the moment, your love of poetry, your dogs and your mother, moments to cherish my friend and one that I have enjoyed with you. Thanks. Have a great day. Rick |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you, Magnus. It was my morning and I am glad that you got one of those candy bars. She only needed one and she had one hidden from you. Alison ______________________ Dominique-Simone Such a nice thing to say. Thank you. Alison ______________________ secondhanddreampoet Thank you, my friend. I enjoy your work bunches. You know that. ______________________ Rick Thank you for sharing the morning with me. Your friend, Alison |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Alison... I love this!! we have two miniature daschunds and they are spoilt to the max!  lovely writing here..RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms az...you did a norman rockwell here...viva!! |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
RDB I love that you read my poems. You are so kind - and I am enjoying getting to know you a bit. A _________________ Dark Thank you for the observation and the support of my writing. A |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Alison, ================================ and thinking of the words i have read thinking that dreams are simply one’s future reality ================================ If you can't dream it you can't live it. This is a wonderful write. Makes me want to get another dog. Well done!  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sometimes I write poetry in the car...going 60 mph on the freeway...and they think driving while talking on the cell phone is dangerous...rarely...James |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
you reveal so much of who you are here Alison I love it! |
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