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Tea |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643
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Nodding I talk to a God without thought; we sit with tea and crumpets, enjoying the dizziness of the day. Nothing moves faster than the stars, setting a daring mood, I clutch the interest of squirrels with my pink toes. Soliciting an answer to life, a shrewd glance slashes at my veins, he sees through my ghostly image, while my tea, cold, spills ice into blood river, “Children are dying” scolding me his eyes laugh, and teeth glare, this is not my place. The sun frowned with heat as the old man from the market shriveled and set upon a journey “What is it to not die young?” wiping the crumbs from his wire lips he finally uttered, “Time” The clocked stopped I called his name… “Tomorrow would have been better for tea” |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Nothing moves faster than the stars, setting a daring mood" nothing except your mind you need big Hugs and room to cry this one bites hard |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Yes well thank you Lady...You are right, because you understand me so well |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
What can I say but you make me feel you. I am not sure that I do understand, but I am not so sure that I need to. You make me feel and want to read more. That's enough for me for the time being. Alison |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thanks Alison... : ) |
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Aloneinmyhead Junior Member
since 2007-07-08
Posts 30Tennessee |
This one has a crazy rhythym to it, but I like it. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
It was a little experiment. Thanks |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Dominique-Simone, I could drag no meaning from this what so ever. Take your time and do a little polishing. Bobby |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you for your critique Robert. I will take that into consideration |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Intense write. I like the twist: the assumption of tea being relaxed. Not even! And it works for me in a surreal manner. Thanks for sharing. sincerely, reg |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
well thank you Reg... |
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