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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643
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Rain…Rain down on me this Paxil nightmare; let the fog roll over me in substance, as ships pass by with glowing lights searching for my being; the tide falls short of the perfected line in the dusty sand, hollowing a new end in this hazy night I walk abusive into steps, unsure of where I am going; attached to feelings feasting at my delusions, gaining strength, holding on to hope. The lighthouse pillaring into stars, captures my eyes; there is a place I belong. Wet, I crawl on backwards knees, in cloudy judgment; you are not there with me. Isolated I let damp lick my hands wavering from each insecurity. Hold out until tomorrow, rain slips onto my tongue I drink warm liquid, taking in the new day; cured for only moments, this is not what I expected this to be; fall down, I scratch rough skin dirty in mud, ripping away at what is right. Blank my zombie eyes live inside, taking pieces of what I left, throwing them together in sea shell caverns. rain |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms D' your pen is so wickedly perfect when wet with the storms of your soul, enjoyed this and others. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you so much Dark.... |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"attached to feelings feasting at my delusions, gaining strength, holding on to hope." yes Monklet this is where your pain lives this poem spells it well |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
It does ironically it is about how he feels and has been dealing but it mocks my pain so well |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
The lighthouse pillaring into stars, captures my eyes; there is a place I belong. You spoke to me in this poem - and carried me on your words. It's powerful - very powerful. A |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Aziza I very happy you enjoyed this. Thank you for your kind words |
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Aloneinmyhead Junior Member
since 2007-07-08
Posts 30Tennessee |
Another one. very good very good |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
As I said you haunted my poems. But thank you again. |
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