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Dominique-Simone
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0 posted 2007-07-06 11:12 AM



Rain…Rain down on me this Paxil nightmare;
let the fog roll over me in substance,
as ships pass by with glowing lights searching for my being;
the tide falls short of the perfected line in the dusty sand,
hollowing a new end in this hazy night

I walk abusive into steps, unsure of where I am going;
attached to feelings feasting at my delusions,
gaining strength, holding on to hope.
The lighthouse pillaring into stars, captures my eyes;
there is a place I belong.
Wet, I crawl on backwards knees, in cloudy judgment;
you are not there with me. Isolated I let damp lick my hands
wavering from each insecurity.

Hold out until tomorrow, rain slips onto my tongue
I drink warm liquid, taking in the new day;
cured for only moments, this is not what I expected this to be;
fall down, I scratch rough skin dirty in mud,
ripping away at what is right.

Blank my zombie eyes live inside, taking pieces of what I left,
throwing them together in sea shell caverns.  
rain

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Dark Stranger
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1 posted 2007-07-06 06:02 PM


ms D' your pen is so wickedly perfect when wet with the storms of your soul, enjoyed this and others.
Dominique-Simone
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2 posted 2007-07-06 06:16 PM


Thank you so much Dark....
The Lady
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3 posted 2007-07-07 05:13 PM




"attached to feelings feasting at my delusions,
gaining strength, holding on to hope."

yes Monklet
this is where your pain lives

this poem spells it well



Dominique-Simone
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4 posted 2007-07-07 05:30 PM


It does ironically it is about how he feels and has been dealing but it mocks my pain so well
aziza
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5 posted 2007-07-07 07:41 PM


The lighthouse pillaring into stars, captures my eyes;
there is a place I belong.


You spoke to me in this poem - and carried me on your words.  It's powerful - very powerful.

A

Dominique-Simone
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6 posted 2007-07-08 01:31 AM


Aziza I very happy you enjoyed this. Thank you for your kind words
Aloneinmyhead
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7 posted 2007-07-08 10:28 AM


Another one. very good very good
Dominique-Simone
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8 posted 2007-07-08 05:48 PM


As I said you haunted my poems. But thank you again.
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