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Prayer from a Firefighter's Wife
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Prayer from a Firefighter's Wife |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida 
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(With the recent deaths of the 9 firefighters in my hometown, Charleston SC, just down the street from where I used to work, my poet got a kick in the heart to finish this one for my husband..) Lord, keep my Angel safe tonight Where peril may be great Lend him strength to break through fire Keep his halo straight Help him Lord, to fly courageous Keep him sure of foot He’ll need your guidance in the dark In blinding smoke and soot Should his wings get blackened there In fire’s ferocity Wrap your arms around his shoulders Lead him through hell’s fury I love him Lord, he rescued me From some uncertain truths He brought me out of personal fire And showed me Love’s own proof Please watch his back, but grasp his hand He’ll have no time for doubt If the flames should pull him in I beg you, pull him out! But if in flight he meets such plight And you gather him from ashen floor Whisper gently my love for him As you carry him through Heaven’s door… © Copyright 2007 dgvarner - All Rights Reserved [This message has been edited by dgvarner (07-02-2007 11:23 PM).] |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Dgvarner, The thought is there, however, some of the lines come out a little forced. Bobby |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...wonderful thoughts from your heart...James |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What a beautiful thought contained within these lines. Just by tweeking a word or two throughout to smooth out the meter a bit would make this piece absolutely perfect  My hat is off to these me who put on that uniform and risk their lives for people they often don't even know Ruth |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
ROBERT~ uhm...thanks? JAMES~ Thanks a bunch! RUTH~ Thanks..I appreciate your comments! I started this in a rhyme, so I had to finish it that way--however, I'll have to admit, I'm a free-verse junkie...I find it difficult to pen all the words piling up in my head while I'm flipping through that same space for the perfect rhyme! I rather liken it to 'condom sex' (LOL); so many words rushing through but they're unable to get out due to the poet's 'safety net' of rhyme! hugs, g |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Denise, ... being a Summerville resident, I guess I was about 20 miles away from where the fire was....The TriCounty area was deeply saddened and affected by the loss of 9 who most certainly should be called heroes...for it took great courage to do what they had done. Thanx for what you have given us....either way, free verse or rhyme is perfectly okay by me....I do know the feeling and it tugs at me a little bit, just as it does you and Ruth. PS: You have been missed~!~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
wow, it's lady Varner! So good to see you, though it's such a tragic event that inspired you to post again. May your husband stay in safety's hands. dg, please visit more often [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (07-01-2007 09:32 PM).] |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Hi dg! Pretty good for a "free-verse junkie". Now that you have gotten it out this way you are free to do a free-verse version. I don't do structural fires, but I've done enough "wild-land" to understand. Always a risk. (Good to see you here!) e |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
This is very nice. Always great to pay tribute to and acknowledge those who serve. Dinah |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your poem was finished in divine time!  ~ When it would be most needed and appreciated. The loss of those 9 firefighters, was felt deeply up here north of the 49th parallel, as well. Your beautifully expressed poem of heartfelt sentiments, brought the tears welling up in my eyes again. May bands of angels protect all those who serve and protect. Be they police, the military, or our firefighters. Your pen ~ and your lovely spirit ~ have been missed! Giving you a loving, welcome-back hug, Linda  |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
dgvarner...A beautiful prayer for your husband. It is said all things come to those who wait and this poem is a testement to that, you waited till the words were given to you from above in order to finish this masterpiece. Thanks for sharing with us...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
MIDNITESUN~ Thanks! It's good to be here again!! Every few months I just have to come back..lol e~ Hey there friend! Thanks for stopping by my poem...Always good to hear from you! You still do wild-land? DINAH~ Thank you! LINDA~ Most appreciate your comments! Thank you much for the welcome-back hug!! PAUL~ Thank you so much--And like your 'signature' says, this poem is me sharing my heart!! hugs, g "...Never regret anything that made you smile..." |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
dg... so nice to see your pen at work with such a loving piece. I hope this prayer is always answered for you. Parker |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DG~ You did a WONDERFUL job on this, gal~ Touching, tender ... so you~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
g it's the feelings that count and this counts for quite a lot |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
PARKER~ Can't tell you how good it is to hear from you... Thank you for your reply--I hope that prayer is always answered too... MARGIE~ Thanks so much for your encouragement!! much appreciated! LADY~ Thank you... hugs, g "...Never regret anything that made you smile..." |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Maybe you 'tweeked' this since you first posted it because I think it is wonderful. I think that the readers also have a responsiblity to place emphasis on syllables to make poems 'work' .. and when I read your poem aloud to myself (twice) it worked wonderfully to me. You moved me to tears. I wish your husband safe days always - and I think your tribute is one of the most moving pieces of writing that I have read in some time. Kudos and thoughts to you, Alison |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
It is a lovely and moving prayer. "He brought me out of personal fire And showed me Love’s own proof" For that act alone he is deserving of protection. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
ALISON~ Nope...no tweeking was done around here...lol thank you so much for being able to read it as I read it! Much appreciate your encouragement! HONEYBUNCH~ Yes he is...lol He's a good somebody! thanks a bunch for your reply... , g"...Never regret anything that made you smile..." |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
My thoughts have often brushed past you... didn't you hear them.  |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
PARKER~ Was that you, dear poet? So good to have your thoughts brush my poet soul! "...Never regret anything that made you smile..." |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Just came back to tell you that I have read this to several family members and friends -- they wanted me to tell you how moved they are and that they wish you and your family the best. Happy 4th A |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
ALISON~ You're the coolest! Tell the fam TY for me! hugs, g |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Please watch his back, but grasp his hand He’ll have no time for doubt If the flames should pull him in I beg you, pull him out! But if in flight he meets such plight And you gather him from ashen floor Whisper gently my love for him As you carry him through Heaven’s door… The love in these lines is so tender... it brings tears!!! I think anyone who loves someone who regularly faces his own mortality so that others can be saved would find you've written their heart! *S* |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
SUTHERN~ thanks so much for your reply...if I have brought tears then I have reached your heart...and that means I've succeeded in sharing my own!! hugs, g "...Never regret anything that made you smile..." |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"Please watch his back, but grasp his hand He’ll have no time for doubt If the flames should pull him in I beg you, pull him out! But if in flight he meets such plight And you gather him from ashen floor Whisper gently my love for him As you carry him through Heaven’s door…" yanno?... I've missed reading you... and especially reading your heart... this?... is ALL heart... wrapped in beauty... one of my favorites... and, in my opinion, one of your best... love you, gale... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DG~ In times of gentle recall I come back to read your heart in this piece~ I was thinking, while reading through the replies, that no ink that comes from the heart is ever 'forced' ... it flows because the poet writes what she feels~ That is just what you did in this piece of heartfelt pouring~ Love you, gal~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
Thank you miss margie... If this had been "forced" it would have taken me a lot less than 3 yrs to have written it! Perhaps if Mr. Jordan knew how to read it, he could appreciate it I appreciate your replies! hugs, g "...Never regret anything that made you smile..." |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DG~ As you and I previously discussed, I am sorry that your feelings were hurt by someone who obviously doesn't understand the heart of a true poet~ Oh yes ... and I see you don't solicit 'critiques' anyhow~  YOU are the sweetest person to have struggled for so long to perfect this for hubby~ Love you~ *Huglets* ~*Marrge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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