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Gifted
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since 2007-06-26

Posts 140
Caribbean

0 posted 2007-06-28 02:17 AM

Restless thoughts turn back, and forth
tiring by mind, adding a burden to my vision.
I try to keep my eyes lifted, and ajar,
but the mental bench presses
do not improve the physique of my thinking.

It all then seems useless,
and I submitt to the yellow grains
dwindling unto the puddles in my head.
The ripple effect that it creates,
swirls me into a valley of confusion.

The vegetation of this place seems
to convey my thoughts, and emotions.
I am lead to a forest of "weeping Willows",
and "concerned Carnations".

Then I glance at a cluster of four petaled roses
that start at " she loves me", and ends in "she loves me not".
The wind whispers those same words,
which sends a terrifying chill up my spine.
I quickly turn back, only to find a blury image
of my princess in the fog,
fading away in the same wind,
revealing the full moon on that gloomy night.

Peace. Love. Forgiveness.
Blessings and Guidance

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

1 posted 2007-06-28 02:36 AM

Jonathan,
Talent must be your middle name,
for this poem, is overflowing with it,
Complex....intrigues me

Usage Note: The introduction of the verb intrigue to mean "to arouse the interest or curiosity..LOL

Gifted
Member

since 2007-06-26

Posts 140
Caribbean

2 posted 2007-06-28 03:01 AM

Thank you ARH. I shall check my birth certificate to see if "Talent" really is my middle name. LOL. I hope that I can continue to arouse your interest interest or curiosity.

Peace. Love. Forgiveness.
Blessings and Guidance

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

3 posted 2007-06-29 11:53 PM

a wonderful poem. How I missed this one. I might in the back yard chatting about who I am with lady SB.

beautiful.

enjoyed

Gifted
Member

since 2007-06-26

Posts 140
Caribbean

4 posted 2007-06-30 12:51 PM

LOL, so Drauntz you found out who you are yet? I'm glad you liked the poem. Thank you.

Peace. Love. Forgiveness.
Blessings and Guidance

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

5 posted 2007-06-30 01:01 AM

I had a dream kinda like this once...

enjoyed the read

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

6 posted 2007-06-30 01:30 AM

My dear Gifted, at my age, I surely know who I am, so I can write a true eulogy for myself
and waiting to be judged.

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

7 posted 2007-06-30 10:31 AM

This is a keeper!
I am really enjoying reading it.

Gifted
Member

since 2007-06-26

Posts 140
Caribbean

8 posted 2007-06-30 11:11 PM

I'm glad you know who you are Drauntz, because people die before finding out who they are. Also, thank you for the comments SEA and Khalil.

Peace. Love. Forgiveness.
Blessings and Guidance

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