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Open Poetry #40

Love To Love

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2007-06-27 10:39 AM

I sat through seas
With eyes open,
Carrying gulps
With sharks
That modeled
Their strut
Through the underneath walks.

Many times
Sirens became bells,
Whispering shadows
Through the distant
Curves of my hairs curls.

As the rose peddle watches,
Reciting its thorns
With the fluid tips
Of its red stitched dress.

A ballroom waits,

His ring, her heart.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2007-06-27 12:04 PM

I'm a fan

marcel
Senior Member

since 2003-03-02

Posts 660
az, usa

2 posted 2007-06-29 04:49 PM

reads like a fairytale..beautiful ending...

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2007-06-29 05:08 PM

So, so pretty.

Did you mean peddles or petals, in your last verse? I took a different meaning, depending on which I read.

What a lovely feel to this poem.

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

4 posted 2007-06-29 05:57 PM

Thank you for the responses, ah yes Diamond, thank you for pointing that out. It should be read as a rose petal. I should be more careful next time. Happy you enjoyed.

Tomer

Nightingale
Junior Member

since 2007-06-21

Posts 31
Depths of The Unkown, UK

5 posted 2007-06-30 04:02 AM

filled with love.
a great piece.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

6 posted 2007-06-30 04:58 AM

yes!

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

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