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Open Poetry #40

One Hand Clapping

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2007-01-22 10:48 AM

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Almost invisible
New snow falls
On open fields

In blue gray light
At dawn the mood is mute
Calm and still

Though there’s no one
In the view
One mind surrounds
All it sees

Under the branches
Of a yet green tree
A first year rabbit
Licks its fur

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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

1 posted 2007-01-22 06:04 PM

John... stunning and beautiful words!
RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

2 posted 2007-01-31 05:04 PM

This is a haiku. Yes, I know it's a bit long for one. But still, the whole thing left me with that feeling.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

icequeen
Senior Member

since 2001-12-09

Posts 633
FL USA

3 posted 2007-01-31 07:06 PM

Your use of imagery is outstanding. I do believe you must write with a paintbrush in your mind....and what an artist you are!

Caroline

He who wants a rose must respect the thorn.
- Persian Proverb

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

4 posted 2007-01-31 09:21 PM

P,

You are probably right.
The poem is no more than
linked verse.

I am glad you liked it . . .

Thank you

John

XOx Uriah xOX
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since 2006-02-11

Posts 1403
Virginia

5 posted 2007-02-01 12:13 PM

nice very nice

"Though there’s no one
In the view
One mind surrounds
All it sees"

::smiles:: very nice

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