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Summer's Dream, Slipping Away
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Summer's Dream, Slipping Away |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Summer's Dream, Slipping Away... In brilliant summer's golden haze I chanced on by and caught your gaze, you watched the field in brillantine caught in daytime's daylight dream... I watched the scene when twilight came it called softly, your sweet name and walked we did, in summer's dream in all its hues of gold and green... without a word and nary a touch we said "I love you, very much" from gaze to gaze we slipped on in in summer's shadows, twilight dim... all the delights of summer held when our gaze took hold to meld my memory, yours, your memory, mine, stopped to hear the ivy twine... and knowing that I could not stay, I told you that I must go away so I went, leaving you behind in summer's heat, under moonlit sky... so now in fantasy's golden haze I'll chance upon you, catch your gaze, as you walk o'er fields in brillantine caught in some daytime's daylight dream... K. Rilling J. 7 June 2000 Revised, 21 July 2007 |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Sunshine, I had a problem with your use of "brillantine". The dictionary meanings I have don't seem to make much sense. Bobby |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
another beautiful piece, dear lady. enjoyed |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Sissie without a word and nary a touch we said "I love you, very much" from gaze to gaze we slipped on in in summer's shadows, twilight dim No matter the season, a special look can carry them all, I think. This one warmed me.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn I love it when you rhyme! just fits my mood today it does |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Karilea "and knowing that I could not stay, I told you that I must go away so I went, leaving you behind in summer's heat, under moonlit sky..." if you but knew how that speaks to me today oh that's right you do a sad beauty |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I never got to read the original version. But, this one here is just beautiful. As always! |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karilea, this is the best way to communicate at times.....no words.  Love this one, Lady!! Hugs, Ethel |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
profound especially this without a word and nary a touch we said "I love you, very much" from gaze to gaze we slipped on in in summer's shadows, twilight dim... oh, how this took me to a particular moment of which captured my being... Your words simply drift me off to that special place in time magnificant writing dear |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Sweetly sentimental, warmly ornamental. You had me almost singing, as I read this.  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
That's what dreams do, slip away....sometimes I think that's all they do. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Very enjoyable piece! glances and gazes always have been hard for me to avoid adagio |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"without a word and nary a touch we said "I love you, very much" from gaze to gaze we slipped on in in summer's shadows, twilight dim..." Karilea, you had me oooing and awwing all the way through this lovely piece of love poetry at its finest!  Love & Sun Light, Linda |
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