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the concrete rose
Junior Member

since 2006-08-01

Posts 33

0 posted 2007-06-13 07:23 PM

All right. I wrote this poem a while ago for my Girlfriend( Still together happily ), and it made her WEEK! So, for your viewsing pleasure, I now present you with

For my Bella.

Sweet blue eyes that shook the stars
Sweet round lips that rattled the car
Sweet soft skin that tingled to the touch
Sweet, sweet hellos that mean so much.

A graceful way in walking down the block
A graceful sass that gives ya' the shock
A graceful way in how she shivers your spine
Just to let me know that she's all mine.

Such a beautiful voice to rattle my dreams
such a beautiful emotion to help me blow off some steam
such a beautiful hand to hold while we walk
Such a beautiful girl who I love to talk to.

Wouldn't change her for the world
Not for the riches in Ft. Knox.
Cause I got her the way she is.
Not something mass produced and boxed.

For my Bella.

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

1 posted 2007-06-13 07:25 PM

good and romantic.

enjoyed

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

2 posted 2007-06-13 07:35 PM

Very nicely done, and how true is it that when we truly love someone we would never want them to change.

RogueandPoet
Member

since 2007-06-04

Posts 126
Oregon

3 posted 2007-06-13 10:10 PM

Always go for the authentic! Nice poem.

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

4 posted 2007-06-14 03:34 AM

I bet she was thrilled. I think we all love to have another write to us - share their talents in such a wonderful way. I know I do.

I am looking forward to reading more of your writing. It's going to be fun to see the variety in your style as I see that now as I read your poetry and prose.

A

the concrete rose
Junior Member

since 2006-08-01

Posts 33

5 posted 2007-06-14 03:39 AM

Thank you Spirit, you can count on that. I love her for what she is and if there's a God I'll thank him every day for meeting this girl.

Drauntz, simplistically put. Muchos Gracias.

Much Ablidge Rogue, and the statement rings true. I didn't want to write her the same ole' stuff or read the same ole' elementary poems. So I shot from the hip and it came from the heart.

And A, I can thankfully agree it will be an honor and priveledge getting lost in your words of wisdom and metaphorical daze.

Cheers.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2007-06-14 06:21 AM

Silky nice...James

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