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Carly Maas
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0 posted 2007-06-13 12:11 PM


So I wrote this quickly the other night. Now that I am reading it over, it's really cheesy. But whatever.


Why do I feel this way,
How could this be,
I never thought I would see the day,
Someone could make me so happy.

You asked for my hand in marriage,
I even had the ring,
I still can't understand,
How you could say,
That you stopped loving me.

I can't lie,
It still hurts,
You made it seem like,
You left me for another girl.

All you've done to me,
After everything,
There's still this huge part of me,
That you keep.

You have my heart,
And always have,
Since that night,
You said 'mine.'

I never stopped loving you,
I don't think I ever could,
I never wanted to see the day,
I was no longer your girl.

I will always be here for you,
A shoulder to cry on,
An ear to listen,
Anything you need,
You know you can count on me.

I love you Justin,
Every part,
The good,
The bad,
The crazy,
The confused.

I've tried to stop,
Though I can't,
You gave me something,
You made me happy,
I don't think I could ever thank you enough.

I would love nothing more,
Than to just be yours,
To come back home,
To be your girl.

If there is a chance,
We can get back to the way we were,
I will wait,
I won't push.

I miss you,
I miss my family,
But what I miss the most,
Is the way you looked at me,
And made me feel at home.

What I'm trying to say is,
Please don't just let me go,
I believe that we are worth fighting for,
I love you,
I can't stop,
I just can't let YOU go.

"One day you'll love me as I onced loved you,
one day you'll cry over me, as I once cried over
you, and one day you'll want me but I won't want you.

© Copyright 2007 Carly Maas - All Rights Reserved
Jenna
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since 2007-03-20
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1 posted 2007-06-13 07:35 AM


Very heartfelt. There is a lot of feeling in this.


Drauntz
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2 posted 2007-06-13 12:01 PM


so very sad. and so well said.

good!



JamesMichael
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3 posted 2007-06-15 05:36 AM


Nice writing...James
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4 posted 2007-06-15 09:54 AM


very tender emotions....I hope it all works out for you!
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5 posted 2007-06-15 11:00 AM


not cheesy at all

I feel the pain here

been there...done it...


LeeJ
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6 posted 2007-06-15 11:28 AM


we are sometimes our own worst critique

this was done very well, sad but can feel the bittersweetness

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