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Open Poetry #40
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The Phat Whale
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since 2007-06-09
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0 posted 2007-06-09 03:28 PM

Hello! I am so glad to find a a poetry community!

A yellow flower is
explored by a red
ladybug; Black dots
on a home; a shelter
always with you, close to
heart; it flies away
protected.
© Copyright 2007 The Phat Whale - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2007-06-09 05:47 PM

Welcome! I enjoyed this immensely!
passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2007-06-09 08:42 PM

and we're glad you are here!

Welcome!

a nice first post here!
Robert Jordan
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since 2007-02-07
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3 posted 2007-06-09 08:57 PM

Phat Whale,

This is pretty good.  I'd advise not capitalizing "Black".

Bobby
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