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not very good at good-bye
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not very good at good-bye |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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I'm not good at good-bye would rather just disappear perhaps the greatest comfort ever are emotions at the height of intimacy showers great adoration communicates bottomless feelings I don't know how to say adieu when the mad dog of blackness approaches treading uncharted courses reluctance pushes courage moment to moment half hidden shapes are amputations of meaning listening becomes a fortress of setting a mind to rest perhaps the real secret deaf ears are ones that walk away last they perceive the slightest hum don't fear the silence come sit beside me ideas and events become great beauty hold my hand our sacred time with nature has begun standing on a bridge of golden opportunity pushes through primeval impasse I hear a hoarse whistle far away you cry, "don't go!" But I whisper with poignant eyes "I can't stay?" I want to do this with dignity my greatest fear ...loosing the ability to be me... on those eternal reefs of pure land saying good bye to life is whispering from a boat coming through drifting drifting or'r ribbons of black water that yet hold no meaning scrubbing my cold body mysteriously tender night calls me like a reward I've never been good with good-bye footnote: my 90 year ol' mother is presently very ill she speaks of death... I ask her, "Lets take it day by day?" she replies "ok" [This message has been edited by LeeJ (06-06-2007 09:12 AM).] |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
LeeJ, Hot dog! I really like the stream of consciousness way this is written--shades of Molly Bloom's soliloquy from James Joyce's "Ulysses". Bobby |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"Lets take it day by day?" she replies "ok" God Bless your mom, and you Lee J. Heart wrenching. JL  "The man who reads nothing at all is better educated than the man who reads nothing but newspapers." |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Awwww, I am so sorry your mother is ill. God Bless you all. I'm not very good at goodbyes, either. My mother isn't in very good health, either. Just the thought of her no longer being here just tears me up. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
heart hugs to you both you know I relate |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
LeeJ, I also love this stream of consciousness, so beautifully natural. You have really touched my heart. K |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
very good thought out write, but all your posts are that why. enjoyed very much and don't we all do the day by day of life. bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
So sorry to hear about your mother, LeeJ. I too am not good with goodbyes of any kind so I was particularly moved by your words which, of course, are excellent as usual. May you find the strength you need over this trying time. *hugs* Helen |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I want to do this with dignity my greatest fear ...loosing the ability to be me... This is so very poignant... and touches deeply!! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
sorry to hear about your mother, my prayers to you and her~ My spirit will rise |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
powerfully emotive 'write'! I am especially fond of the lines: "mysteriously tender night calls me like a reward" applause!! [my mother (age 92) is currently 'dying by inches' from ovarian cancer...it is so hard to (helplessly) watch...particularly when someone has been part of ones life so very long!] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...I'm not good at goodbye's either...no one wants to lose someone they care for...but indeed it is something we will all go through in our lifetime...take care...James |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I cried. Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I want to do this with dignity my greatest fear ...loosing the ability to be me... My Mom and I went through this last winter. She is doing much better, but I lived these lines with her. Thank you for expressing them so eloquently. Alison |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
LeeJ you and your mother are in my thoughts this is perfect especially "our sacred time with nature has begun standing on a bridge of golden opportunity" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ As I once said in a poem, "only love can pierce the mist of time." And your goodby will echo in the wind.  |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
LeeJ... I'm so pleased Sir Sy sent this to the top as I would have missed these beautiful and heartfelt words .... i'm having good thoughts for you and your mom ... mom's are special in every way xx RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
"my greatest fear ...loosing the ability to be me...' you have put voice to many peoples thoughts and fears. I am truly sorry about your mother. I will keep you both in my prayers. |
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Aloneinmyhead Junior Member
since 2007-07-08
Posts 30Tennessee |
This is so sad but so powerful, you brought a few tears to my eyes |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
LeeJ, May you both find blessings in every day. Peace dear friend. Nicely done and thank you for sharing. |
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