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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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going nowhere and doing nothing are all that are important really if you get there fast enough and are religious in your efforts to accomplish it with zeal but you knew that about my eyes as you had worn them often with the matching nothing else the low cut one in morning by the windows overlooking nowhere you wrote me poems about love like the virgin tick talking to the promiscuous bat about virginity's rush from the nectar of second hand life and then you would laugh on your tiptoes in highheels little girl womaning secrets I thought you were entering the dark places of my room but you were really leaving someone else's daylight and needed coffee for your nerves so I was the doctor in your prison searching for an addictive cure for your freckled shoulder lonely ______________ daark |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
yes, very nice words here Mr Daark RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thank you ms B |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hey D  it sounds as if you were accepting things as they were...as though, to you, nothing else mattered, at that point in time... "but loving her"...a place we've all been...at one time or another in our lives...you loved her more... In answer to you question, to my "come er" remark on your other poem...no, I wouldn't back away....as long as it was truly friendship nothing more, nothing less...(smiles) hugs and best wishes always... [This message has been edited by LeeJ (06-05-2007 08:38 AM).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"I thought you were entering the dark places of my room but you were really leaving someone else's daylight and needed coffee for your nerves so I was the doctor in your prison searching for an addictive cure for your freckled shoulder lonely" maybe both? ahhha yes mister, I could see how you would be the addictive cure...  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gotta agree with Sea here |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I will reiterate my prior statement. If there’s a cure,  I don’t want it…  |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Dr. Dark~ No doubt your research has soothed many a shoulder; freckled and not... K |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
hmmmm came back for another read, and after reading all the comments sheesh was I way off...? dahhhh, you'd think I'd learn by now...  well, still loved your poem... thanks for humoring me.... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
pipcrew..thanks to each of you...it is a pleasure to see how you read between the windows on my scribble...in this case, it is just the journey..enjoying it moment by moment, not keeping track of where and hows... thanks again gang |
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ladylisa Member
since 2007-04-29
Posts 342Florida USA |
I so enjoy reading your work. It is done with great ability to intertwine the meanings and give a mystery. Great work, and so very true. Freckled shoulder lonely, great stuff. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Your poems take me on a journey that I thoroughly enjoy. I kind of ride along on the magic of your words. This one had me thinking a lot, reading -- reading again -- funny how that is. I really do love your style. A |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Journeys are indeed meant to be remembered, some, perhaps, scribbled down, lead lines on some virgin paper... remembered by some, but by those who chance to pick them up... they are felt deeply and knowingly. Well done, Sir. It's so good to have you back again. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thank you ladies for the read...lisa, sunshine and az...you make me smile |
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