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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. The red sun Through a hole In the clouds Over the horizon A dusk light Quietly rests Upon the sea What the heart feels About the past A ship at anchor On the bay It falls and rises With the waves Falls And rises Yet again . |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I like the picture in this one. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
After dinner "Sea in swell Waves not quite breaking On the shore Heaving over wreckage Remnants from other loves Beneath the light Of an autumn moon" |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Beautiful. A |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
simply suberb! [exquisite]... [for me, this is 'as good as it gets!'] exceptionally long-sustained applause!! |
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Forever in Love Junior Member
since 2007-05-31
Posts 24 |
I liked it. You can really picture this. |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
Your descriptive poem had me seeing this picture, and feeling the serenity of it. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thank you all for responding to what was after all a response to "For Harvey" Thanks again John |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
John~ Just a beautiful word-painting that I like very much~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A very fine sketch. But I don't understand how this relates to the Harvey poem. |
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gmcooper Junior Member
since 2007-05-30
Posts 47 |
If I were offereing a critique on this I would say how does tht title fit, because it could really be about anyplace. That is the only part I didn't get. The rest is soothing/nice. |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
agree with gmcooper |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
K, "For Harvey" is not a nice poem; it was difficult to write. This poem in response was about the swinging back of the pendulum. Thanks again to all for reading John |
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