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Open Poetry #40

God's Map

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2007-05-31 02:43 PM

The unmasked man,
The one
Who tanned the skin
Of sand,
Who yielded the lands
To bring the temples
Of peace for one last stand.

If bullets were mayhem,
Then this land of
The Middle East
Shreds the unknown
And drinks with the bears
Angry tone.

The God that descended,
Left the suns island
To shape the countries
Turquoise seas,
And embellish those
Wearing crowns
Lampooning off the
Suns familiar scowl.

The land of “peace”,
The land that sanctions
Bullets for prayers.

The domes mosque,
Its prayers sunken in-between the paved streets.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2007-05-31 11:11 PM

I read this a few times, before I could articulate the impact. Strong words you chose...the backdrop left me with an impression of a desolate wasteland.
You wrote these feelings quite well, and I think them difficult to give voice to.

gmcooper
Junior Member

since 2007-05-30

Posts 47

2 posted 2007-06-03 11:25 AM

Metaphor is very interesting and brought about nicely.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2007-06-03 03:05 PM

The land that crucified Jesus...James

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