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Open Poetry #40

When Summer Ends

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2007-05-30 01:48 PM

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September
The leaves
Are beginning
To go

Already some
Have fallen earlier
Than any of us thought
They would

The sun sets
On yet another colder day
And with more hours
In darkness than before

All the flowers
In now what lesser
Light there is

Seem to bend
From the passing wind
In gestures of goodbye

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Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2007-05-30 01:53 PM

Highly visual writing John. I could see the flowers blowing in the wind, waving goodbye to summer. Nicely done.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2007-05-30 02:18 PM

The leaves turned and fell
later this year than last
life, these days, is slower
than those warmer days of past

I suppose I'll have to get up
and start moving around eventually,
wave goodbye to the moon and forget
how you lost your love for me.

So inspiring! You are!

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

3 posted 2007-05-30 03:24 PM

Thousands autumn trees
I pick up the single leaf
that signed with my name

between the pages
I press it into a sigh
to replace lost dream

of stretching summer
alone the waving northern light
what a long bright night!

Dear John, your poem is beautiful though with sadness. enjoyed as always

(I have not turn on my iPod yet)

[This message has been edited by Drauntz (05-31-2007 01:36 AM).]

Mr»ÄlleÿÇät
Member

since 2001-06-02

Posts 190

4 posted 2007-05-30 08:16 PM

I liked this piece, though I'd rather not think of my rake just yet

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

5 posted 2007-05-30 08:22 PM

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Thank you all

Especially you
Mr Alley Cat
wholly unexpected

Thanks again

John

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Mr»ÄlleÿÇät
Member

since 2001-06-02

Posts 190

6 posted 2007-05-30 10:30 PM

Thank You for the tip for my poem

Here's a shorty for "Spring"

They say April showers
Brings May flowers
But that's really
Just a con

It's time to embrace
The Power Rake
And mix gallons
Of Bug-B-Gone

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