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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2007-05-30 07:02 AM


Morning skies awaken
in amber hues
where God cradles
the quiet of calm



in his palms.



It is then,
when thoughts drift   in wish
of finding lost moments



                 where fingertips touched the dawn



with hands clasped
dreams were shared

        {I can't erase the memories held there}



Night arrived too quickly
along with the
ditheistic nature
slowly burning,



turning you into
that sometimes stranger

unknown, yet known.



Blackness entwined
with rays of light
     and I tried



to keep you
from slipping

     to rise above

but darkness
overpowered



  the power
     of my love



now only reflections
linger at the edge
of what once was



where my heart lies

      ever still










[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (05-30-2007 08:52 AM).]

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secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
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1 posted 2007-05-30 11:12 AM


fine, powerful, emotive 'write'!

I especially liked:

" Night arrived too quickly
along with the
ditheistic nature
slowly burning,

turning you into
that sometimes stranger

unknown, yet known.

Blackness entwined
with rays of light
     and I tried

to keep you
from slipping

     to rise above

but darkness
overpowered

  the power
     of my love"

long sustained applause!!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
2 posted 2007-05-30 12:34 PM


like looking in that mirror again


JL
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Texas, USA
3 posted 2007-05-30 04:46 PM


You are indeed a Gentle Spirit.
A beautiful write.

JL

Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
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Los Angeles California
4 posted 2007-05-30 07:21 PM


beautiful and simply beautiful.truly

very touching

enjoyed

Mr»ÄlleÿÇät
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5 posted 2007-05-30 07:46 PM


Wonderfully powerful read
MGROVES
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6 posted 2007-05-31 01:00 PM


beautiful~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

gmcooper
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since 2007-05-30
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7 posted 2007-06-02 09:38 PM


This is a poem that takes the reader beyond his/her boundaries.
Neeraja
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8 posted 2007-06-03 01:55 PM


wow... simply beautiful!!
The Lady
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9 posted 2007-06-03 10:06 PM



touching
yes indeed gentle Donna


SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown
10 posted 2007-06-04 12:30 PM


How beautiful this is!
Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
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11 posted 2007-06-04 06:17 AM


Thank you all so much for stopping in and leaving your kind words behind. You are so appreciated.  Hugs to all.
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