Open Poetry #40 |
dreams and gravel soda |
Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
those dreams never did bother me really I knew they were not real only temptation in the typical not much on appealing apparel standing at some other man's window waving goodbye to him and hello to me as I drove by slowly often as if it had been planned all along around the blocking my thoughts with the engine off quietly but the stereo on proud so you could feel me before you even got to know me and could hear me too from the inside secret side before I spoke and woke you ______________ daark |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
me thinks the inside secret side is your best side D. G'morning Dark. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
as if it had been planned along around the blocking my thoughts with the engine off quietly but the stereo on proud so you could feel me before you even got to know me and could hear me too from the inside secret side ~*~ secret sides silent sighs... |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
so you could feel me before you even got to know me and could hear me too from the inside secret side Touched inside me with the words, you did. A |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love that side of you |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks to each of you Donna, Sunshine, Ms Az, and Dixie |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
beautiful dream. and beautiful poem. enjoyed. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"before I spoke and woke you" stranger darlin' I love this line you are a great alarm clock |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ahhhha check your mail |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Draunz' Thank you for the eyes. ______________ ladyone, and you are always on time, thanks lady friend _____________ suesea, mail? oh why not just come and whisper to me..dare you..thanks babe |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I like that, standing in the other man's window waving goodbye to him and hello to you at the same time. Nicely convoluted. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms nan...like window shopping? thanks ms |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
I can see 'you' in these words very clearly Mr Dark ... be well RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
An intelligent write - witty in a dark and sensual way. I really enjoyed this. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms r & b thanks ms __________ ms bb, thank you |
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