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Jenna
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since 2007-03-20
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0 posted 2007-05-29 01:41 PM


Pressures too much
You have to loosen up your hold.
You burden me with your demands
Your criteria I am bound to fail
Your dreams I am sure to shatter.
All this I live with
all this hurt that I cause
weighs down on me
and is with me every second of everyday
dominating my thoughts and speech
my actions
and my demeanor.
Pull any tighter
and I am bound to go underwater
and I wonder
if I will ever be found again.

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Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
1 posted 2007-05-29 01:53 PM


poor thing. Where is the strong emotion before?

this is a very good poem that so clearly states the unwanted pressure of "love". So freedom is more important than "love".

enjoyed as always.

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !
2 posted 2007-05-30 11:24 AM


powerful, emotive, very 'real' write!

sustained applause!!

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