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luvvbuzz
Junior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 24

0 posted 2007-05-27 04:35 AM

The memory blurs fast
Of the woman i loved, before the last
Though memories do often fade
They get stored, as soon as they are made
In a safer place, for when we leave this plane

Do we meet up with all our old loves
When we have taken our last breath?
Do we forget the fights
And love again after death?
Are our memories all thats left
Of a life of love thats been bereft?

I hope we do, because it would mean no more
The pain and loss in romantic war
The petty squabbles, the pointless fights
The times apart, the lonely nights
So if memmories are all we take
To the land after this when we never wake
I will still be loving you.

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Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2007-05-27 11:44 AM

Oh....now this is a

!

" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

luvvbuzz
Junior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 24

2 posted 2007-05-27 12:14 PM

i am thinking this needs a new line to finish it off?

how about...

i shall not forsake.

opinions?

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A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

3 posted 2007-05-28 01:39 PM

This was so emotionally filled,
touching me as I thought of someone,
and hoped these were their thoughts,
words, and feelings.

~ARH

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2007-05-29 02:29 AM

I think that additional line would be wonderful

though the poem is quite moving as it stands

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2007-05-29 07:05 PM

What an absolutely moving piece ... and your suggestion for the closing line is a good one, but perhaps consider this also

Your memory I shall not forsake~

BEAUTIFULLY done~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Kristabell
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since 2003-11-29

Posts 678
Portland, OR

6 posted 2007-05-29 08:33 PM

You give me something to think about. This is touching.

Nice write,
Kristabell

"You are today where your thoughts have brought you; you will be tomorrow where your thoughts take you." James Lane Allen

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2007-05-30 04:18 PM

Nice...James

luvvbuzz
Junior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 24

8 posted 2007-05-31 04:06 PM

thanx very much for all your responses, i am glad i was able to share and that so many liked it. many thanks

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