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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2007-05-22 06:58 AM

some women are too pretty
to be in jail
or behind walls
when windows would better serve
their glimpses favor

and this coveting is difficult
for a blind man
writhing his gauntlet
of good shepherds
with white withered canes

as my fingers remind me now
that words become buttons
to be done by undoing
and scattered on the floors
of rage less pages

and those walls are the skin ends
that suffocate lovely
with wrinkled up laughter
crushing the color from roses
onto the wine of her wrists

staining the daydream of my sleeves

______________

daark

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2007-05-22 08:01 AM

Hi, Stranger! The entire poem was alluring and captivated my senses and my imagination. However, I was especially struck by the following lines:

"as my fingers remind me now
that words become buttons
to be done by undoing
and scattered on the floors
of rage less pages"

~ Finger food for thought!

May you live long ~ and love long!

EA

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2007-05-22 08:18 AM

HeyDarkOne~
You have been missed !!!
Good to see you in your poetic prime~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - [email protected]

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2007-05-22 08:31 AM

Welcome home, Stranger!

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2007-05-22 08:43 AM

Lord have mercy....this is beautiful. And you...c'mere....

....you are home. So nice to see you here D.

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

5 posted 2007-05-22 11:28 AM

I am glad you are back
I missed the beauty of your words
and I missed you

Exquisite

A

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

6 posted 2007-05-22 11:33 AM

WELCOME BACK COTTER

Loved this...

and those walls are the skin ends
that suffocate lovely
with wrinkled up laughter
crushing the color from roses
onto the wine of her wrists

staining the daydream of my sleeves

ahhhh, sweet
and perrrrrr
fect

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

7 posted 2007-05-22 06:05 PM

check your mail

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

8 posted 2007-05-22 07:08 PM

beautiful poem of romance. enjoyed

you are a stranger to me but not dark though.

enjoyed

Kristabell
Senior Member

since 2003-11-29

Posts 678
Portland, OR

9 posted 2007-05-22 11:27 PM

Hey, it's good you're back. A lovely poem.

Kristabell

"You are today where your thoughts have brought you; you will be tomorrow where your thoughts take you." James Lane Allen

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

10 posted 2007-05-23 06:41 AM

To each of you
my humble thanks

it is always good to return
to the forest of pip

D

ladylisa
Member

since 2007-04-29

Posts 342
Florida USA

11 posted 2007-05-30 07:31 AM

Your words always take me there in my mind. I can see your vision and love the way you write, what a talent you have been given.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

12 posted 2007-05-30 01:03 PM

always love your words

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

13 posted 2007-06-03 06:12 AM

ah you have returned! Lovely Mr Daark.. you have been missed .. be well RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

gmcooper
Junior Member

since 2007-05-30

Posts 47

14 posted 2007-06-04 07:24 AM

as my fingers remind me now
that words become buttons
to be done by undoing
and scattered on the floors
of rage less pages"

This is so far from mediore, it's not funny. This is just great. I have read through several and will read over them again. I really enjoyed your word choices. Hope I'm not repeating myself here. To me, finding a poet who writes like this is something I get happy about.
"words as buttons" wow. I love that.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

15 posted 2007-06-04 06:13 PM

thank you folks for the touch...gm, I am in humble thanks for your reviews

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

16 posted 2007-06-06 05:16 PM

"Some women are too pretty to be in jail."
Huh?

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

17 posted 2007-06-06 05:29 PM

behind walls...away from windows and sky

not able to be seen...

thanks james

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