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The Shield of Crimson's Hall (for the Virgin Queen)
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The Shield of Crimson's Hall (for the Virgin Queen) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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In the morning when you come home to where your heart is hung? Find it bleating like a bag, strung with sinews of the young lad you used to be, I know, it's not so different to grow sags of hags beneath the eyes and claim them evidence of "wise." You really ought to give it up. The seroquel and sips of cups deadly nightshade in the glimpse of your future, now is this: I beckon angels with a swirl: I studied books Enochian. I see ambition of the world in this, St. Anthony's token: and never once you offered prayer you vanquished your protection where you should have placed a broken branch to mind the others of the path to come for you, and rescue you-- your woman now become your shrew and thoughts of lost gratuity comfort none who truly need. And even if you bled your knees? I'm a fool who would forgive weeping at the thought of "please" "Baby, you remember when?" "Let us start anew again..." Someone should beat sense in me-- but oh my love, it best not be you who drank too deep of cup. Your Queen is cold from lack of touch... and her hymen grows again-- a shield of Crimson Chamber's Hall. "Damn him, damn him, damn them all!" and this is how, the knights grew dim, She never suffered fools again; she never wept a tear at all-- the shield of Crimson Chamber's Hall chose the necessary end of a love, so stealth and fleet: The Queen forgave and graced the thief-- she crucified him upside down... |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Wow -- mesmerizing .. loved how the words flowed .. the rhythm ... the story .. and ... and this is how, the knights grew dim, I loved this a lot. A |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
this is a beautiful poem. I read several times. and I love it. it is a real poem. Thank you SB. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
not only a real poem, but absolutly filled with images....words of life...how cruel it can be, and yet, it always seems to me, you find humor in all things...love your attitude, and remember, it is because of our past we are who we are, and I'm so happy and proud you are here.... Luv and hugs Me |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
this is beautiful, serenity .. the rhythm is nearly hypnotic, so easy to get lost in. I love the way you write Sheli |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Karen...Being a man i'm not sure if you want me to reply or not.LOL Great poem. I really liked the story behind it, getting older and not being a spring chicken anymore. The asking for forgivness and how some find another mistress in a bottle and how both parties suffer from loneliness. This poem has real meat to it and that is great. Beautiful flow...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 There's a bit more to this than the obvious, but yanno? I think I'll just let this be whatever ya'll want it to be. Thanks to the brave souls who ventured, um, in--where even angels fear to tread.  Love you all!  |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Tell us woman. Least we hang you from the gallows and leave your body for the rats to feast upon. Damn did I just write that. I guess so.That is what I love about your poetry so much, I never really know for sure how to take it, but I love it...Paul Drop me an e mail if it is a private thing. ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I get it all except the hanging upside down...is there meaning behind it that I am unaware of? lack of touch cold cold so cold remember? let's go back... it can be better yes this was perfect for me back then and perfect for my mood today... love you madly. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
thanks for sharing My spirit will rise |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Magnificent, Karen, though I ache in your sadness. I can't remember whether I have ever asked you - or whether you have ever told me if you have animals, particularly cats and/or dogs - my suggestion is, when you feel like this, hug them if you have them, or get them if you don't. Mine do wonnnnnnnnnnders for me. - Owl |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
In the Hall of the Crimson King, the hanged man may unto bring the blade of vision sharply set to cleave the stoutest shield behind which hides a heart aflutter, in its timeless yearning stalk for love's sweet anodyne. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Your Queen is cold from lack of touch... and her hymen grows again-- a shield of Crimson Chamber's Hall." and there's the rub Karen or in this case not perfection! |
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