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The Opal Water
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The Opal Water |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Long past noon when the banshee sleeps and the tall grasses stiffen, you may find an indentation in the ground where lovers, rolling and wet, covered with pearls of sweat had open-eyed sex. The earth saves things like that. It keeps them like marbles and summer wine until they are warm and green. Caught against a rock, sun spent, they will change their color each morning until the last wind coats the ground with dust. Who will remember when lush summer lips begged blossom from a seed? In the harbor, far from the loud noise of meadows, the fog has closed the sky and muffled the mood of salt. Even the sea has gathered oil and water and twirled some forbidden coffee spoon into life. Can you claim the reflection? |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Martie, you are most assuredly one of the grand-finest ‘imagers’!: I LOVE: “Long past noon when the banshee sleeps and the tall grasses stiffen” “The earth saves things….. It keeps them like marbles and summer wine” “In the harbor, far from the loud noise of meadows, the fog has closed the sky….. Even the sea has gathered oil and water and twirled some forbidden coffee spoon into life.” APPLAUSE! |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
It is a beautiful poem of nature song with a bit of heavy tune but romance is between the lines. is is good I love these verse "Who will remember when lush summer lips begged blossom from a seed?" what a cry for love?!!! enjoyed as always |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
very deeply beautiful, as only you can do... I treasure your writes... stunning portrait... |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
A beautiful read this morning...thank you Dinah |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
Ohhhhhhhh, myyyyyy; Odale, I will refer to this one many times! alw Jaime |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love opals... so you had me with the title. *S* Beautiful read! *S* |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"The earth saves things like that". Indeed... I have touched the warm rounds of flattened bluegrass and wondered was it deer that lay there moments ago... or but a dear moment of two, under an August moon? |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
With the sensual touch of your pen you bring the magnificent vision of this poem to life...BRAVO!!!...a stunning write...*Big Hugs* |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Martie, you create such wondrous atmospheres that allow the reader to enter the scene and to become part of it. Absolutely beautiful and evocative. Love, Margherita  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sigh....Martie, this is just beautiful!  .......jo |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
This is very good Martie Would like with your permission to include it in my Word File of poems by others. Again very good John |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Martie, Martie, Martie.  |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - this takes me to a place I love to be and shows me things I love to see - lovely - Paul |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ There is opalesque magic in the word-swirl of your making~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Martie "Who will remember when lush summer lips begged blossom from a seed?" your work is luxurious your words flow together in lovliness and abundance |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Had to come back for a second read, Sissie! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You caught moments that glisten in time. Took my breath away with each and every line.  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Up you go - people can't miss this one!  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Martie, your opalescent mots made for a compelling read. This is poetry at its very finest! Every line is sheer magic! Kudos to you, Dear Poetess! Love, smiles, and a pat on the back, Linda |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
When I read a poem, all too often I become embroiled in the words, the construction. On some lucky occasions I find that the words don't matter, and I'm swept into the story and the symbol of it....and on the rarest times of all, I'm simply there; no words, no story, no symbols and imagery, simply and blessedly there. That's where this one took me. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Martie ... this is VERY good. Bob |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Martie, Yeah, I like this. Your first strophe almost makes a trip to the county seem worthwhile--and I don't like the country. You've picked up a fan. Bobby |
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