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Open Poetry #40

First Love (tanka)

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

0 posted 2007-04-27 08:12 PM

First Love

Sweet eternal sky
hung with precipitous moon
in soft midnight blue
over rivers of first love
where fine hearts shall float but once!

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

1 posted 2007-04-27 10:42 PM

good. read several times to feel the spirit.

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2007-04-28 07:10 AM

It's true Bruce...I think there is really only one first love~~ and the feelings that accompany it.

M

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2007-04-28 10:38 AM

what a memory!

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

4 posted 2007-04-30 01:59 PM

So very beautiful. *S*

But... it isn't the first, but my last love that claims my yearnings and gifts me with memories of what beauty really is. *S*

Robert Jordan
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since 2007-02-07

Posts 392
Philadelphia Pa USA

5 posted 2007-04-30 02:08 PM

Secondhanddreampoet,

This works extremely well as a Tanka. I like it.

Bobby

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