Open Poetry #40 |
beautifully busy |
artyjames New Member
since 2007-04-23
Posts 3 |
seems like love is something we have no time for but we have time for TV time for our crushed velvet vices that hug our body so comfortably that... we dont even want to let its grasp EVER lose us so we hold tight but in the process we remain shunned to the rest hung by our belt not in suicidal tones but simply our pants from falling to keep us up I've seen freeways packed with lost souls inside beautifully busy I give it all to the divine |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Well done. Indeed! Bob |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
A lot of truth in your words. Welcome to PIP! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, now, there's a roller-coaster of thought to ponder! Welcome to Passions! Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting! |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Welcome -Juju |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
I love this one. how true! |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
James, Learn to use contractions. "dont" is not a word in the English Language. Perhaps you mean, "don't", which is a contraction for "do not". You might also work on capitalization and punctuation. Nice idea though. Bobby |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
I enjoyed your opening...No time for the important but time for TV etc. Welcome to Passions! INclan |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"I've seen freeways packed with lost souls inside beautifully busy" A sad but true commentary on the state of so many lives. Welcome to Pips. |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
BRAVO!!! What an introduction..."time for our crushed velvet vices"...How true it is...If some of the time we spend on TV was given to showing someone we love that they are loved there would be many more happier people in the world...I love this poem...Very well done...*Big Hugs* |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I've seen freeways packed with lost souls inside beautifully busy I give it all to the divine wise words with a potentially spiritual insight that is there for all of man |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Very Beautiful and very Thoughtful! Welcome to Passions! I will be looking for more from you ... ~Terry ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, |
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