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Sunshine
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Foggy Lines Last evening’s cloudy skies came down to kiss the earth this morning, my open window letting in the cool, gray tendrils of deeply dense, thick fog sounds of far away birds. For a moment I am home again, Kansas is but a dream, having disappeared, my beloved coastline hugging me chilly, and in a flash, Dad’s fresh coffee will tickle my nose while knowing mother will snuggle five more minutes under warm covers for she never was a morning person. I will not attempt faux curls, but instead plait my hair this morning, allowing the mist to set waves for an evening’s brush of lush strands under loving hands, and soon enough, I will make hurry up sounds to brother and sister for their breakfast, as my hands fill reused brown bags with bread, butter, and mother's thick strawberry jam. Outside, these foggy lines of morning swirl to me scents of grass and new leaves, with salt in the air, becoming a masque that I head into, face first on my way back to Kansas. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
the fog, no matter where it is, always takes me home too.  "and in a flash, Dad’s fresh coffee will tickle my nose"  my dad always got up very early and I knew he was up when I smelled the coffee...there was something very comforting about it. That and vanilla pipe tobacco. I still look for my dad when I smell that, no matter where I am. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
~sighing~ Touching this screen just so, I am transported...to that coastal fog for a quick misty sip. Well done, lady Sunshine. |
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Andrew Sewell Junior Member
since 2007-04-16
Posts 24County Durham, England |
Beautifully written Sunshine, I can just imagine the scene unfolding as you describe it but also i was transported back into the places of my childhood. Thank you for sharing this with us.  Andrew |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dear Sissie...Isn't it wonderful how traveling to those lovely memories can be brought in by something so gray as fog? You took me there with you, not just to the place, but to the loving feeling. Thank you! |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
sweet, sweet, sweet poem. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Such vividly painted memories you extracted from the fog, dear Karilea! Enjoyed this greatly, love your trips back in time! Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
A trip home through the mists and mind......So glad you decided to visit there today....Hugs. |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
those moments between sleep and being awake, when the mind recalls images and times from our past. Those precious moments, where those we have lost are still here, and all is as it was. I loved the whole feeling of this. |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Foggy Lines and warm memories... You have penned it so beautifully and in such a warm way. Thank you Sunshine |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
What comfort good memories bring and how well you have described your own. Only today someone said to me to go back to a very special moment in my childhood and I actually couldn't remember one. Perhaps the second childhood has over-shadowed them. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
felt like I was right there with you...you certainly move the senses into believing all the sensational visuals you gift. Lovely writing. |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
Hi, K. Wish you could take me Pacific ocean beaching. :-----) J [This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-20-2007 03:32 PM).] |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
Hmmm ... Interesting ... Interesting ... J [This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-20-2007 03:33 PM).] |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
oh Karilea I can taste that strawberry jam... feel the salt in the air what a beautiful morning... |
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OriginalNYGuy Junior Member
since 2007-04-14
Posts 14Texas,US |
Hurry up sounds !...Brilliant ! Ahhh I love it |
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Rottiestyl Member
since 2007-04-19
Posts 60Illinois, USA |
A perfect display of poetic art! |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
oh I love this, the fog always makes me remember my little one...we live on the top edge of the cliff right above the river valley, and most times the fog does not reach us, choosing to remain down lower, but this morning, it was all the way up to envelope our yard as well, and I woke him up to see it...he looked out at the fog...and then back at me, and said, "do you like the fog grandma?" and I said ...of course..."yes I do" and he said "well if you like the fog, then I will like it too" and so the fog...never fails to make me smile... was good reading this, though I almost felt as if clicking red heels together would make it come true.... |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
I most certainly could not improve on the grand cavalcade of comments by such a fine array of 'P.I.P.-world' poets about this write!; ergo, I shall just add: Excellent! much applause!! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Bring on the coffee smell...I remember the smell of it as I lay in bed early in the moring...didn't like coffee back then...thought it was yuck! Now though...I love coffee...love the smell of my memory, succinctly brought back by you... thanks, my friend...thoroughly enjoyed.. j. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
You are so good at pulling memories out of all of us, SIL! I remember Daddy's coffee, too. ....jo |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
You can sure pen a vivid picture here. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I think you've taken us all to our heart-homes with this... no matter where we now may dwell. *S* Absolutely lovely!! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you. It was a special moment, yanked away too quickly. Your comments...are buttons of warmth and caring. Bless you all. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
a jewel of a poem, written by you, this touches the heart in many a ways Hugs2u dearPoetFriend  *~coco~* |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah~~ capturing how the sight, feel, or smell can take us back to where we remember home..and the people who were there... very nicely done Ma'am... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
One can always rely on their senses, my friend. Thanks, Cpat...for the eyes and understanding. |
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