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Healing Senryu
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Healing Senryu |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia 
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Sick humanity. Healing injustices, priority One. |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Midnitesun, This is a cute poem, with a good idea. It could be improved by making the period at the end of the first line an emdash. Bobby |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It is indeed time to turn such things around... so many are speaking out in various ways... thank you, Kacy. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I'm not sure what emdash is, ...ellipsis? or ~??? Robert and Karilea, thanks for reading and commenting. |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
oh.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
... Namaste. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I agree and this is right to the point, perfectly done. Beauty fades from life when human rights are ignored and love is lacking Love, Margherita |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine 'Senryu'.... also (unfortunately) likely rather 'timely' with respect to recent events in Virginia! Applause! |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
Like the book I just finished. I am sickened, REVOLTED and SICKENED the way he assaulted that girl just as she was going into labor. (Sunshine, I'll write you in a bit) even worse because the culprit got away from accounting for what he did, the heinous, brutal, heartless and bestial savagery with which he snuffed out not just one life but two is indescribably appalling and Horrible ... Had I been on Randal's team, I would have hit Larsen with as many counts as Federal and State statutes and a creative interpretation there of I could imagine. (This all has to do with Yesterday's Love). The past, of course, can not be changed ... Well, Sunshine could re do the ending. But a fitting way to end it would have been a very generous settlement, a very generous settlement, to have been awarded to the families and a public apology be made to them by the governor of the state. And that's just for starters Okay, Okay, it's only a story, but ... I'll get over it ... Southern Cross |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Good write , I don't know enough about senryu to comment on the form but the thought is apt. a good commitee can decimate communication. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
definitely priority One Kacy speaks loudly thank you... |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
I'm back for a 2nd. perusal of this 'write'... rather critically important thought for the "Runaway American Dream" in our times! |
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