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Jasmine Winds and 'Deep-Time' Echoes
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Jasmine Winds and 'Deep-Time' Echoes |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! 
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Jasmine Winds and ‘Deep-Time’ Echoes Why must I demand all things great and true even in this barren place, this lost and lonely space where only strange, sad silhouettes dance to songs of dreams reproved, and crimson passions (failed by the fleeting fragrance of a jasmine wind) are swept beyond the night’s last shadows, when the staggering silence settles down upon a weary world prepared to ‘crack’ (and call again) at dawn, in ‘Deep-Time’ echoes of long-forgotten loves! [This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (04-14-2007 06:16 PM).] |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
read several times... it did not make me happy. I wish I would not dream a dream like it tonight. a wonderful poetic poem. enjoyed |
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ArtSolstice Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 498 |
An aching, searching, yearning write in a changing world, when one always, ultimately returns to the certainty of silence, night, and dawn. Well done! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Jasmine Winds..." At first I thought that my scent had drifted all the way to Pennsylvania! I am wearing genuine jasmine essential oil this morning. I love the fragrance.  Regarding your emotive and masterfully scribed poem, I would like to 'Echo' the response by ArtSolstice. He was spot on, in my opinion. May the sweetness of spring, lift your spirits. Linda  |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Secondhanddreampoet, The thought is there in this poem. I'd recommend breaking it up into sentences. That would make it more concise and understandable. Bobby |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
you know poet your work moves me so I want to keep it for my own maybe... write it on my wall |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Beautiful, just as it is. Thank you for the journey. - Owl |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jasmine grows outside my bedroom window...sometimes it asks questions, but usually it gives answers. Why all things great and true...because that is what in the end is inside of you.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
In a timeless reverie, I sit silently sighing scents of jasmine. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
... and of those loves yet to come! True poetical heights in this one! Love, Margherita |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ah~ I have such a strong desire for the fragrance of jasmine ... and then you gift~ 'long forgotten loves' ... ah ... they are never really forgotten ... are they ? No, I didn't think so~  Thank you so much for being a poet~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"Why must I demand all things great and true" because if you don't you won't get but then again, maybe what we want isn't what is best for us. That aside, a truly moving piece. "Deep Time" - yes, I like that! |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Ah...but the echoes of forgotten loves help us to learn to treasure all the more the love that surrounds us now and in the future...even echoes have lessons to learn that make us better and happier people....Lovely writing...*Big Hugs* |
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