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Snowflake From Hell
Senior Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 777
My own little Icey Oblivion

0 posted 2007-04-11 07:23 PM

My sadness,
Translated into madness.
Sorrow means no future to spend,
A dramatic dead story with no end.
Nothing is innocent nothing is fair,
I killed all I have except despair.
It's the season the trees die,
Cover the face with my guilty hands and sigh.
The birds don't sing no more,
Mind from body is tore.
My sadness,
Translated into madness.
Sorrow means no future to spend,
A dramatic dead story with no end.
Nothing is innocent nothing is fair,
I killed all I have except despair.
The rivers never come back,
Skies aren't even gray just black.
I keep wondering how did I end up like this,
Must have been something I missed.
My sadness,
Translated into madness.
Sorrow means no future to spend,
A dramatic dead story with no end.
Nothing is innocent nothing is fair,
I killed all I have except despair.
My sadness,
Translated into madness.
I killed all I have...

Now feel your fear, there can be only one

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

1 posted 2007-04-11 07:32 PM

oh, so very sad.
It is good that you have mercy on your "despair"... struggle for a hope. oh, the hope...chained us to life.

shared your sadness.

Forest does not only lodge dead trees.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2007-04-11 07:43 PM

I feel like suggesting you to sit and breathe.
This is impressive in its word power.
I hope this is just a temporary sadness and madness ... may the black sky disappear and may you feel the warm touch of the sun.

Love,
Margherita

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2007-04-12 08:14 AM

Hey, Hot Flakes, you wrenched my heart with that sad write!
Come here, big fella, and let Earth Angel give you a big hug-o-love! Sounds like you are in grave need of one!
Your writing always stirs this readers emotions!

This poem puts the "D" in despair! I surely hope this is just you writing from the 'dark' side and that all is really well with you! If not, then I am sending some sunshine your way!

EA

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

4 posted 2007-04-12 11:24 AM

I can assuredly 'relate' in particular to:

"My sadness,
Translated into madness.
Sorrow means no future to spend,
A dramatic dead story with no end.
Nothing is innocent nothing is fair,
I killed all I have except despair."

However my (personalized) last line
would likely have been:
The 'Runaway American Dream'
killed all I have (and believed in)!
leaving only despair.....

By the way: Great choice of 'UserName'!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2007-04-12 11:41 AM

Powerful write Kyle!
Sending heartfelt hugs your way.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2007-04-12 07:27 PM

enjoyed the repetition and understand the killing of all but despair~~

M

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

7 posted 2007-04-12 10:29 PM

Powerful write here boyo...You have grown as a poet

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