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A Dirty Little Secret
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A Dirty Little Secret |
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MindBodySoul Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 196NJ |
You referred to me as "a dirty little secret" Whose insecurities... were reflected in what I wrote to you You reassured yourself... of how secure you were Always a sign of insecurity.. But did you never stop to think that the insecurity you spoke of was a reflection of you... That you were only on borrowed time! Did you ever stop to think, that my message was an act of fury.. because all you ever showed was a lack of respect... intentionally done, tohurt me Did you ever stop to think that exposing your affair... for the world to see could have been an act of insecurity, cause you were only on borrowed time Your words did not hurt me they liberated me... setting me free of doubt I was right all along... I laughed but not at you.. after all, you were told what you wanted to hear but at your words... your pain was visible.. but so was mine you couldn't hide it... and nor could I Jen--->MindBodySoul [This message has been edited by MindBodySoul (04-11-2007 09:11 AM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Hi Jeanette, I don't know if English is your first language or if the errors are deliberate but I wish to point out that if you meant secret (something hidden) it's spelt without the 'e' but if you meant secrete, something that is leaked through the skin the context is incorrect. Also you've written who's, which means who is perhaps it should be whose (belonging to who) However despite this I think your writing has potential and strong emotion. Cheers Kethry a good commitee can decimate communication. |
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MindBodySoul Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 196NJ |
Thank you for your input, yes English would be my second language and no the errors were not intentional. It did not help that I wrote this at work (got inspired in the middle of the day) I usually tripple check my stuff... All in all, i greatly appreciate your critic. It will only make me better Jen--->MindBodySoul |
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