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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. Even though more capable There is still a nervous nonsensical Childish quality to this conversation It might have been better If smoking were allowed Which of course is not And drinking this early Would be unseemly How can we talk poetry With the very real world And its schedules Clamoring in our ears And besides That’s not at all Why we are here Each was moved By something other than words Not yet forgotten that has its origins In the beginning of time Yet it is too weak to overcome A mutual empirical wariness As if that itself would actually Make much difference in the end Meanwhile a few pigeons Are perched on the statues of the dead Outside beyond the gabled roofs A train is passing . [This message has been edited by Huan Yi (04-08-2007 09:39 AM).] |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
This is the first poem in open poetry I've ever seen that I liked. Great job! |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
very right. enjoyed as always. is the train still passing? |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you are really making me wonder if you are in my same city the descriptions of these places in your poems are so like the ones I see here |
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