Open Poetry #40 |
Clouds Do Change |
1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
Clouds Do Change I wonder if you ever think of me a tender whisper upon wind free could have been a lifetime chance calm in the face a hurricane dance but a sweeter name passed your lips and I had the face of moon eclipse I gave you my heart oh, how it flowed a narrow path on a broken road at night do you now drink alone a cold inside you down to the bone and wake chilled to the morning that leads back to you with a warning and did she break your heart playing your game pretend then depart now leaving you the same way you left me blue to gray clouds do change when it rains does the thunder echo your pain or do you still run from feelings missing as I face this day weathering without you reminiscing “all romantics meet the same fate”…Joni Mitchell [This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (04-01-2007 12:55 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a pretty write how it just flows off the tongue! The ending is fantastic! I can so relate to this, but you knew that. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very nicely worded Helen...lovely! For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I sure understand this. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Beautifully penned! Intense! Love, Margherita |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Poignant, and beautifully written. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
and I relate to it also Helen plaintive song... "as I face this day weathering without you reminiscing" |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
A look back at a sad relationship, done better than I have ever read. "does the thunder echo your pain" I love your descriptiveness. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Tender, achingly beautiful. Eric |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
"and I had the face of moon eclipse" This is one of the sweetest lines I've read in a long while Helen. My child's smile tells me there's still hope |
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