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one trick pony |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest 
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a pony’s slick loins curve under the eye hooves lift lightly bending with grace walleyed he runs around and around waiting to perform mane lifted by running and indecision red brown in the sun crest bowed oh he is a beautiful creature glossy with the sweat of intention power gathers in his muscles and then he flies fanciful exacting exquisite still he is only a one trick pony not able even to bow |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
This is one of the absolute best 'writes' that I have had the unmitigated pleasure of reading in a very long time! [I was clearly 'transported' to the wonderful scene arranging itself via the vivid imagery of this peace!] Excelent! [This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (03-25-2007 08:22 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I understand the poem, but I have to wonder--has anyone checked the pony's hearing? Perhaps he just can't hear the applause and doesn't know any better about "bowing".  (Karen is addicted to "House".  )And your lovely poetry.  |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Oh, Milady... but to fly... what more does one need? Lovely write, thank you for sharing. MoonShadow . |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lady A delight to read.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Absolutely superb writing!! Very much enjoyed!  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I can almost taste the dust in the air, and hear the neigh of apprehension and the hoofbeats of a Pinto pony about to exploe in midair. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you so much poet for your kind words Karen you make me laugh I am addicted to House too and you did him so well I checked … the pony can hear he is just dumb thank you gentle Sir MoonShadow flying is a lost art thank you Sir Sy  thank you dear Nancy Kacy, thank you being there |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
and for just a moment I could see a stallion from some past running through the open fields. Kate, this is just the most lovely visual, and a reminder of a warm memory. Lovely writing hon. Hugs. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
vivid write perfect! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you gentle Donna for your kind words thank you so much Dixie |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
You make me smile and that is a gift all of its own. Thank you. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
But what a trick that is! Lady Kate, your poem is enthralling ~ magical! Loving hug, Linda |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
artful narritive of perhaps disposition? seamlessly profound, exquisite in effect, very much enjoyed.... |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you Linda Angel hugs to you thank you LeeJ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Oh, oh, oh, oh, oh! (Tearful and wordless!) When I get a moment, I will email you and explain what Flicka, God, you and Aziza (you and Aziza unknowingly) did for me with this poem and the timing of my reading it. However, with regard to one of your responses, I just need to explain to you about your pony. He is not dumb. He is just so noble and lacking in vanity, that he wouldn't respond with a bow, even if he had been taught to bow. He didn't see his performance as we do. He saw it as an expression of his loving life and making others happy. He understood the reaction of the applause as a love reponse. He reponds with love shining out his eyes. Sorry for telling you about your poem-pony, but, you see, I speak Pony. Forgive the stupid questions, but what is the origin of "walleyed"? Is it "wall-eyed" or "walley-ed"? And whichever, what does it mean? Thank you for the Flicka moment. - Owl |
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