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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
why walk, asked the man with no braces why talk, asked he who had no tongue why see, said those who hid their faces and so the scribe turns pages filled with dust deciding if he may, wondering if he must why run, said she who had just begun why stand, cried they who had no legs why laugh, he moaned as if done and so the scribe turns pages filled with dust deciding if he may, wondering if he must long faces, empty thoughts, somber sobriety as words like spillway waters lose their soon uttered, oft mistaken jewelry and shining lights of scrivener’s tools puddle in ambiguity… why, asked he who topped the summit rules, why, he cried, ‘tis simply done, for sake of being free |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
I enjoyed this a great deal. Rae |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Steven, "why, he answered, ‘tis simply done, for being so" .................... Think about it John |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
John, you are exactly right...wasn't satisfied with the last line...must have changed it a dozen times...finally got fed up and surrendered to the rhyme scheme...should have stuck with a similar line to the one you suggested...far better for the continuity of the idea... |
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