Open Poetry #40 |
The world |
Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
The wind blows caution into freedom, the sun burns holes in the truth, and the sea takes back what it brings like givers that turn into takers. I thought one day I knew the way until the rain washed certainty out and my much valued silence destroyed by the rip roaring invisible thunder. The light, yes, the light of lightening streaks shows up the flaws in personalities and the beautiful, beautiful, twinkling stars needs far-off and unattainable. The moon simply gets up too late to alter the course of a woman’s fate and endless streams of love remain streams because rivers they’ll never be. Trees to me are a great mystery but too soon must die from disease or from ever attendant human greed that uproots but never replants. The world is indeed a wonderful place; it teaches us how to save face and the thorns on every rose bush show bad always outweighs the good. This is the world we are born to; will the one we die to be better? Helen / 22 March 2007 |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
thought-provoking question indeed shame we treat the earth as if it will never run out sad stuff |
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WindWalker Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218 |
This is a thought-provoking write! |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
This is a very deep poem, which very deep thoughts. The meaning is strong without being overbearing and yet captures the readers attention very well. I liked this a lot. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
had to come back and read this again, as I always do with yours this part will stay with me all day... The moon simply gets up too late to alter the course of a woman’s fate and endless streams of love remain streams because rivers they’ll never be. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you all for your kind comments. Very much appreciated. Dixie - maybe we are the only ones who can change "fate" but it's so much easier to blame it on the moon. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I love reading you...as you go beyond what most believe to be truth...which is in my book, a marvelous room with a view.... Exceptional writing |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Trees are our treasure, our life! I agree with you, our world is in bad shape, for humanity's own doing. Great insightful write. Your question at the end is certainly born of hope. We go back to where we have come from, I think. The bad thing is that we forget what we have come to do here ... and with great difficulty we have to climb up again on the ladder of awareness. One day we shall see things more clearly! Love, Margherita |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
Okay I am going to try this see if it works I like the part about the sea taking back what it has given ... I believe, well never mind. I'm not even sure this is going to work, or anything |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah, Helen, so far across the sea. I am so happy I have finally figured out how to use the reply function again ... ... The ocean of my dreams ... ... ... ... ... ... Jaime |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Very powerful and contemplative piece! I will walk this world with Hope, and change what I can to make it better! Thanks for sharing!!! Terry ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you everyone for your kind comments and, Terry, individual thought and effort is all that is required. There are forces at work that will snowball it or not depending on the requirements of the bigger picture. |
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