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Tired Whiney Friday Morning Poem
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Tired Whiney Friday Morning Poem |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Tired Whiney Friday Morning Poem I am so tired – I just want to sit back a bit and whine Maybe over cheese cake and a bottle of sparkling wine I just need to talk about how tired I am and all I still have to do Oh, by the way, how are you? Did I mention that lately I have been tired and feeling out of sorts We could talk more about me – over coffee and a chocolate torte Really – truly.Life is good and all is simply grand But this treadmill I am on is sometimes more than I can stand Right now, I am tired and just want to get some rest Fatigue seems to put my healthy eating plan to the ultimate test With eyes wide open my mind just drifts and dreams Of hot chocolate brownies smothered in French vanilla ice cream It’s so good to see you again – I hope all has been well Now let’s sit and talk about me – I have so much to tell Did you know that I am tired and feel a bit run down? Do you ever feel like your world has turned into an upside frown? Let’s take a minute and get a chocolate mint latte and a bite It seems like lately I am wound up and just so uptight I think a chocolate treat is the very thing that would make me smile I am tired you know – Let’s sit and talk for a while How are the kids, the dog and the cat? Do you think I am getting fat? Let’s get together soon and we can talk about me Do you think that German Chocolate cake is sugar free? Oh, did I mention that I am tired? aziza |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Gave me the munchies, y'did.  "tired" some people can wear y'right out-- sounded more weary here, but surely there is one or two who really do, care.  Enjoyed the poem--but do y'think my reply was okay? *laughing* and  |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
love it Alison let's talk about creme brulee and did I mention... oh never mind you seem tired |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
serenity blaze Thank you so much and yes, I think you nailed it. I am more weary than tired. I am coming off months of worrying, tending and ferrying my Mom as she traveled her journey to better health. She is better -- and I am tired. Thank you lots for reading and understanding. Darlin' Lady I do so love creme brulee. Let's get together and eat some - we can even talk about us (not me). Thanks for all the wonderful words you bring to my life. A |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Loved this because most women can indeed understand. I wonder how we do it all sometimes. martyjo |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
martyjo Yep, maybe it is a PMS thing too -- I just know that these Wasabi dried peas are not chocolate (as much as I try to imagine that they are)! Have a good weekend and thanks for reading and commenting ... A |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this makes me giggle... of course when I am really tired, I get silly anyway...yeah, it's been a long week for sure enjoyed the write! |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Dixie .. I am glad it made you giggle .. it made me giggle too when I wrote it - even as I was whining. A |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
I love love love this - it sounds like me lately! I too, am taking care of both my parents and the journey is not nearly over. I practically live on chocolate, caffiene and nicotine! So, let's grab a double caramel latte grande, and order a tiramisu, then sit down together, and have a talk about you!  We definitely won't get sleepy!Caroline |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England |
I'm tired of whining women I'm tired of whining men You think you're tired young lady Read what falls off my pen I get up in the morning I haven't slept all night I spend the daytime yearning for the sleep I miss at night The only time I'll rest my bones Is when I'm in my grave but until then because I'm tired my energy I'll save. So are 'you' really tired or is it just a scam to get some folks to sympathise, feel sorry for you mam? I'll admit I like your poetry and the tale you have to tell but if I could get a word in I'd get sympathy as well! |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Caroline, It sounds like a date to me. Just say when. A |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Ivor Your story is sad that is ever so true Just what is a poor man like you going to do You work all day and lay awake at night You’ll get plenty of sleep when you are out of sight All wrapped up in your coffin all snug and tight Not a sound to be heard and not a shaft of light To bother your rest as you close your eyes Then you won’t hear my plaintive cries Yep, I am tired and there is really no scam You can take me (or leave me) just as I am I write my stories but I can’t make you read Is it the “like” for my words that make you take heed? Ivor, Ivor here’s something you can do You can whine on the blue pages if you want to too In fact, if you write real good, I may listen to you And I’ll write nice things when my read is through. So, I am off to bed to get some needed sleep I have no problems slumbering nice and deep Thanks for reading and your responses are fine I really love how you put them in poetry rhyme. A |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England |
Aziza, Aziza, now you've read my song I have to admit, I was playing along I'm not really tired and I sleep really well but was caught by the nature of your your poems spell. To ride on it's currents and follow your style I felt it was best to respond for a while with the thoughts in the mind of the one t'whom you spoke as you poured out your problems to this girl, or this bloke. You made it apparent, abundantly clear, that your whining you'd spit out and their's wouldn't hear. I loved how you wrote it and felt t'others pain for I've known many people who are exactly the same! |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
my dear sweet aziza i know you're tired, I do but let me tell you, friend o'mine I'm whinier than you did you know, sweet friend o'mine there's a 6 in the morning too? It isn't just an evening time I swear that it is true! The commute to work is awful The traffic's just a mess It takes me 5 whole minutes Just to get from bed to desk! I tried to call in dead today My boss was not amused She said that notice is required of not one week .. but two! I don't want to work today don't want to cook or clean or care for dogs or cats or kids I just want to sleep and dream I have to do the laundry too and keep the dogs from barking While i'm listening to doctors babble and my daughter's constant talking This working thing is for the birds I'm tired all the time I need a wealthy fella So I can just sit here and rhyme Come on over and we'll discuss this and have a drink, or maybe two You may be tireder than me but I'm whinier than you *grins* come on down, shuga, I'll mix ya some appletinis and we can forget about how tired and whiny we are (I'll let ya jump on the munchkin's bed!)love you! ~sheli~ By words the mind is winged |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Ivor, dear Ivor, you grow like a friend I would try to listen but my words have no end I can talk and just babble with no conclusion in sight To take time to listen - well - it takes all my might I'd give it a whirl and try once again But just for a moment - do you have an ear you can lend? It would be nice to have an extra to just carry with me Like a portable someone to listen;it would ever so dandy. You could look like Van Gogh (did I spell his name right?) And I'd have someone to talk to tucked away so safely and tight It's only a thought, not really a plan But I know YOU'D come through 'cause you are that kind of man! Thank you. A |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
sheli You are so quick with the humor and wit I have no coffee in hand, yet here I sit To try to do justice to the repsonse that you write Did I mention that I am tired and a wee bit uptight? I do love martinis - but apples just suck Can we have our martini simply with an olive or such? I'd take one right now but it's only 7 am I don't think I can justify it (even if it is with a friend) 'Course we can say it's an "Instant Breakfast" and slug it right down A martini could bring a smile to that upside down frown Sheli, I am on my way with some dogs and two cats We won't take up much room (Okay the cats are more obese that just fat) I am ready to dance and I am ready to sing Oh the joy and the sunshine we will all bring (insert sarcasm above) So on to the bed jumping - we can just quit our jobs And drink breakfast martinis and lounge like two slobs Life is so good Life is so grand This wondrous plan Is almost too much to stand! A |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England |
Friends, Romans and Countrymen lend me your ear? Removing it would be the thing that I'd fear! To look like Van Cogh would not really do, and to listen correctly you really need two. So if you require me to 'lend you an ear', along with the pair of them I will appear. I'll need entertaining and plenty of tea but for that I just listen and always agree. Along with divine chaos, I'd share in your whine (as long as you comfort me all of the time) I am a good listener and empathise well (but easily caught in a tired woman's spell) Please text me or call me if we have a deal (I'm a man who can listen to babble and squeal) Send me two tickets, for me and my wife, for it's her I've to thank for this skill in my life! |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
LOL Cute poem...I once heard though they have a cellar for our WINE-----ING!!!!!! Hahaha!!!!!!!!! Cute though take care...JulieAnn ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Ivor It seems that you have a tiny bit of a fear When I mention the possibility that you can lend an ear It’s actually merely a very small suggestion I assure you that I won’t bother the ear that’s in question It’s really quite nice of you to kindly volunteer To fly over the ‘pond’ to come on over here Just to take some time to have a bit of tea For you and your wife to spend some time and listen to me It would be ever so comfy to sit and shoot the breeze Hey, I would even talk about a bit more than me We could spend some time to talk about you I can be quiet to listen for a minute or two I can’t wait to meet you – we sure will grand old time But I have no money – so you are gonna have to buy the ticke on your own dime. A |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
JulieAnn I am glad that you have enjoyed It's been a fun thread for me. A |
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Sphinxen Junior Member
since 2007-03-03
Posts 38U.S. |
frustration and chocolate cake mmmm... "No one now dies of fatal truths, there are to many antidotes to them."- Nietzche |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Yep and sometimes frustration is only cured by chocolate!!!! |
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