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Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

0 posted 2007-03-08 02:27 PM

Please, no
don't rub that in
      right there,
because the salt does sting
when it slowly rolls down
trickling into old wounds
not yet healed completely

and not needing to be re-opened
  by sharp reminders,
      anyhow.

Yes,
  it still hurts

        when you touch

                       right there.

seek the flame within yourself
and let your soul be cleansed by
the fire of love. Axel Ekenstierna

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

1 posted 2007-03-08 06:51 PM

Best approach! Get it out in the open!
Talk about it.

Nice one GS.

JL

Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

2 posted 2007-03-08 08:45 PM

ah yes gentle Donna
I know this feeling
so well

beautiful!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2007-03-08 10:06 PM

I remember a wound
where my own salt
ran into it...

and I remember some wounds of illness
when my father took me to the sea
and told me to stand in it

and I would be healed...

amazing,

what salt can do.

Even, if it is right there.

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2007-03-08 10:10 PM

titled perfectly, love your technique on this one--an excellent write...

JLHunter
Senior Member

since 2006-10-08

Posts 557
CA United States

5 posted 2007-03-08 10:45 PM

Hi, GS.

Amazing, isn't it, how many people seek to rub in that salt or receive it without complaint? You'll not be one of those people, will you? Even when the wound is still fresh, you stick up for yourself...umm, don't you? At least, that's what I got from your poem--unless the words are only written and never spoken!

Anyhow, wonderful write!

John

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2007-03-08 11:26 PM

Yep, don't ya just hate it when that happens!

....jo

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

7 posted 2007-03-09 02:07 AM

Oh....I liked this...I can relate to this oh too well...Luvs~

"The more you suffer, the more it shows you really care.." ~ The Offspring

"Oh every time I close my eyes...I lock it down..oh.." ~ Nelly & Tim Mcg

Paul Wilson

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since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

8 posted 2007-03-09 09:33 AM

Donna...Tough write. I can relate because of old wounds that we think are safe from the salt of past feelings...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

HopeS
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 4596
Perth Western Australia

9 posted 2007-03-09 10:46 AM

Rubbing salt into old wounds , ouch yes that hurts

Hope

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

10 posted 2007-03-09 12:24 PM

good read

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

11 posted 2007-03-09 06:01 PM

Excellent Donna..
I have been where this comes from.

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me. ~

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

12 posted 2007-03-09 06:57 PM

Sad thoughts well put down. Excellent. martyjo

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

13 posted 2007-03-09 07:32 PM

You say it so much nicer than I.

I'm a little more, um, abrupt.

But then, you ARE the gentle spirit.

(yanno? I can't bring myself to use that spoonrest either--so it is on my wall, next to the light--to remind me.

)

thank you lovie

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

14 posted 2007-03-10 07:54 AM

I read this earlier, thinking how much this is me

*sigh*

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

15 posted 2007-03-10 08:26 PM

Nice writing...James

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

16 posted 2007-03-12 08:05 AM

Ah m'friends, at the moment ya'll have no idea how much your kindness means to me...thank you, each and K?

Check your e when ya get round tuit ok?

dwgpoet
Member

since 2007-03-05

Posts 122
FL, USA

17 posted 2007-03-20 02:33 PM

This one's for my archive.

It hurts to look in there,
yet, reminds me to love.

Fairplay
Member

since 2007-01-15

Posts 222
England

18 posted 2007-03-20 05:03 PM

Err well OK

"There were No Weapons of Mass Destruction"

Sometimes the odd person might need a gentle reminder.....

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

19 posted 2007-03-20 06:29 PM

I have been touched this is beautiful!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

20 posted 2007-03-27 08:02 AM

You each make me smile with your comments, thanks so much ya'll.

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