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Dwindle and Dwell
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Dwindle and Dwell |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
In the dwindle of the daylight hours all too familiar thoughts may dwell. Those which prefer the fading light to cast their melancholy spell. Here lie those memories entwined of present day with distant past, of former loves and futures bright by choices rendered overcast. As if, when daylight comes to close, in contemplation of what's done, what stirs upon an evening breeze is where your thoughts are apt to run, down pathways interspersed with sighs for what may have been otherwise. |
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Rod Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 149Auckland New Zealand |
Extremely well written! A poem to which everyone will surely relate. Enjoyed it very much.Thank you. The greatest thing you can do for another is not just to share your own riches...but to reveal to him his own. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dwindle...good word I'm ready for the day to be over with myself could use an evening breeze |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Rod, Thanks so much for the review. This one went unfinished for about two weeks, I just couldn't seem to get the ending, finally it kinda fell into place. Doc Passing Shadows, Thank you. One of three in the standard English language from what I understand . I just couldn't seem to fit "Dwarf" in. Doc |
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Rod Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 149Auckland New Zealand |
Yes..I 've found it sometimes pays to pause for thought when trying to end a good poem. It certainly worked for you in this instance as the metre works really well. The greatest thing you can do for another is not just to share your own riches...but to reveal to him his own. |
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