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In the Snow

Don_Juan
Member

since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

0 posted 2006-11-06 10:34 PM

In the Snow (Francesca)

White Feathers flew
     Floating as fallen stars
to the ground
     illuminated by you

I remember now
     your hazel gaze
peering through the window
     of my face
my soul set ablaze
     and my heart tossed
upon high tide emotion
     (that misleading ocean)

We ran
     in joy of sceond fresh snow.
you tackled into
     my willingness to fall
I remember that hair
     so newly layered
and your perfume
     that replaced the freezing air
(how I wish to remain there)

nice use of muffin

wordancer
Senior Member

since 2000-07-30

Posts 809
VA

1 posted 2006-11-07 12:59 PM

ah love...it does tend to magnify one’s senses, nice visuals.

As you have no punctuation at all in this poem, I’m curious about the period after snow.

Ink runs from the corners of my mouth
There is no happiness like mine.
I have been eating poetry.
~Mark Strand

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

2 posted 2006-11-10 11:29 PM

I really like this poem of yours!

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thougts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Don_Juan
Member

since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

3 posted 2006-11-12 10:49 PM

thank you both for stopping by and taking a peek into my memories.

Wordancer, i was meaning to put punctuation in but, it seems i only got around to putting it in at one place.

thanks again,
-John

nice use of muffin

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