Charioteer's Hangout (pantoum)

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Corner Pub #3

Charioteer's Hangout (pantoum)

turtle
Senior Member

since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

0 posted 2009-02-23 06:52 PM

Another pub poem

Charioteer's Hangout

The gang's all down at Habeb's Place,
With horses tied to hitching post,
They're fortifying for the race.
There seeing who can drink the most.

With horses tied to hitching post,
New chariots in noon day sun;
There seeing who can drink the most
Before they start the circus run.

New chariots in noon day sun,
Fresh painted for the coming match;
Before they start the circus run
They order up another batch.

Fresh painted for the coming match,
A drunken mob in red and gold;
They order up another batch,
Perhaps they'll put the match on hold?

A drunken mob in red and gold
They're fortifying for the race;
Perhaps they'll put the match on hold?
The gang's all down at Habeb's Place.

Turtle

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

1 posted 2009-02-24 12:10 PM

They're there for their next round for sure..

Enjoyed your pantoum.. of course, and your photo is all set..

turtle
Senior Member

since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

2 posted 2009-02-24 06:51 PM

Thank you Nan,

You did a good job of fixing that scrunched up picture.

Hope Fleeting
Member

since 2009-02-23

Posts 52
Smalltown, Somewhere

3 posted 2009-02-25 12:29 PM

I can just picture a bunch of people celebrating before a match...and celebrating... and celebrating trying to remember what they're celebrating for...

If not today, the match will surely occur tomorrow?

Great writing.

~ Previously Known as Broken_Winged_Angel and BrokenWinged_Angel~

I know when to bow my head in defeat and move on...

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2009-02-25 10:15 AM

Was the use of "there" in the first and second stanza intentional? At first, I thought not, then when I reread, I thought...maybe, just maybe...

I did enjoy.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

turtle
Senior Member

since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

5 posted 2009-02-25 05:29 PM

Hi Hope,

I reckon they'll have the match later that day. That way, if they get run over they won't feel a thing....lol

Hi suzy,

lol...Yes, and every time I come back to this poem I change it, then realize why I did it.

Thanks gals

turtle

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