Maybe you would understand

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Maybe you would understand

rmortimer1987
New Member

since 2008-05-05

Posts 7
Qld Australia

0 posted 2008-05-05 05:37 AM

Seing yuor picture
Reminds me of all i felt
All the love and pain
All the sadness and sorrow

Seeing you picture
Made me feel all the shattered
Pieces that you left
Of my fragile heart that
Still have not mended

Seeing you picture
Brought back everything
Buried deep and thought
Lost in oblivion
Back into the sunlight

If only i culd tell you
Exactly what you did to me
If only i could show you
Exactly what you made me
Then maybe you would understand

2dalimit
Member Elite

since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

1 posted 2008-05-05 10:13 AM

I feel you are very emotionally troubled. I understand. Good thoughts.
Thanks, and welcome to this room of PIP.
Melton

You can still edit your misspellings.

midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

2 posted 2008-05-10 08:27 AM

Dear Ruth,

I feel for you in this.
Welcome to Passions, welcome to Corner Pub.

Love,
MiCheLLe

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues

rmortimer1987
New Member

since 2008-05-05

Posts 7
Qld Australia

3 posted 2008-05-10 08:39 AM

thankyou both for your replies...
i welcome any advice from anyone on my writing to improve my skills.
Ruth

BrokenWinged_Angel
Junior Member

since 2005-12-17

Posts 29

4 posted 2008-06-12 03:00 AM

'Seeing your'** would be the grammatic correction to your poem that I see right now.

Outside of that, it is very touching. Good job.

BWA~

~Formerly known as Broken Winged Angel~

Life is like a coin. You can spend it any way you wish, but you only spend it once.

midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

5 posted 2008-06-15 11:03 AM

Dear Ruth,

I can feel your emotions in this, very expressive very real.

Love,
MiCheLLe

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues

rmortimer1987
New Member

since 2008-05-05

Posts 7
Qld Australia

6 posted 2008-06-15 11:25 AM

thankyou all again for replying.....

thankfully the person this was written about seems to have removed themselves from my life again so all is well back in my headspace.... but thankyou

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