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twinsgd
Member

since 2000-02-13

Posts 416
Ontario,Canada

0 posted 2008-03-06 03:49 PM

Having learned a thousand times before
My feet were meant to stay on the floor
There's really no excuse for why
I still keep trying so hard to fly

Yet once again my wings spread wide
The senses reel as I ride the tide
Of rising hot air, like a bird that soars
Looping and winding,hear the wind roar.

Time is passing, how will I land?
Perhaps like a kite, touching down on the sand
Perhaps like a rock kicked off a bridge
like an avalanche from a snow covered ridge.

Thoughts of landing infest me with fear
Glancing down the earth gets near
With a thundering crash I hit the ground
Sheets blankets and pillows scattered around.

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

1 posted 2008-03-06 04:37 PM

This poem made me smile, as I often dream I am flying. So far, I have never dreamed I was landing!! Much harder I'm sure!

Betty Lou

Betty Lou Hebert

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2008-03-07 10:51 AM

I too have dreamt of flying but i haven't tried to land. This is precious. Joyce

junemac
Senior Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 1005
uk

3 posted 2008-03-11 05:07 PM

This is such a common dream and one you bring perfectly into focus with your words ... wow this is a great ride. Nicely penned
Hugs June xxxx

Dennis L. White
Senior Member

since 2000-02-17

Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.

4 posted 2010-01-13 06:05 PM

I can relate to this poem so well, I like the way you tell the story and provide a suprise at the end. I have often dreamt of flying, it feels so good in dreams to soar with such ease and grace. I enjoyed your adventure through your writing...Write On!

Dennis :^)

serenity
Junior Member

since 2011-01-30

Posts 13
Queensland, Australia.

5 posted 2011-02-07 09:40 PM

Such a lovely poem.
I too dream of flying, as do many others.
But ah yes, it's in the landing, however it may be.
Loved it, thanks.

Verbena
Member

since 2005-10-17

Posts 196
Australia

6 posted 2011-02-13 10:09 AM

I'm not much of a flyer; that is why I do not dream of flying.

I liked your poem though.

Verbena

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

7 posted 2011-02-17 03:17 AM

Now this made me smile!!!

Totally adorable I loved IT!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

byski
Member

since 2006-01-26

Posts 235
Alberta, Canada

8 posted 2011-03-05 02:08 PM

Those dreams are the best! Well done, you can almost feel the ending coming by the sing song way you write the first lines.

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

9 posted 2011-03-06 03:37 PM

Lovely write. That first stanza is absolutely captivating! It pulled me right in.
Great job,

{~~*~~}

EmilyTheStrange
{~~*~~}
I have a pet unicorn...his name is Flavius, as in Flavius Belby. Flavius does not like gumballs..

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

10 posted 2011-05-22 02:05 PM

Enjoyed... *~Coco~*

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