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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
Wild How wild the rose that whispers to me. The fragrant scent of an apple tree. Lost in the mist of a water fall. Evergreen or not at all. |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
yes..."wild", seems like 4 different poems and i like each one...ever considered developing each sentence into a separate and unique poem with a bonding or unifying word or thought pattern? I mention it only as a constructive idea. You are very creative and i would like to see what you could do with this suggestion. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Wooo is right. Each line does sound like a thought that could be expanded. Joyce |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
dog, just had a "wild" thought, after reviewing your poem for about the tenth time. "...would a rose by any other name still smell as sweet..." the apple is member of the "rose family" ...evergreen...evergreen...evergreen... what does it mean...a memory. |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
yes, joyce and moondogz, stop...reread and listen...its a picture in one's mind...its a memory...its like the evergeen...its there...its not deciduous! its not lost like falling leaves. |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
moondogz, change nothing. its perfect! |
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Vincent Member
since 2007-02-03
Posts 52 |
this is just excellent..Vincent |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
Thanks everyone for your comments, much appreciated. I'm not positive, but I think this poem is about conservation. The reason I'm not sure is because "it" sort of wrote itself. Please excuse my delay in replying. |
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