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Teen Poetry #8

Tension In The Tempest

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2007-06-04 06:04 PM

can you feel this this rising tension,
growing with the cold hard stares?
can you tell that your gonna make me brake,
and leave me in despair?

because if that is your frame of mind,
i have some things to say.

dont think ill go down so easily,
im not that weak in mind,
i really dont think you understand,
that i dont need you all the time.

so stay awake, way up late,
lost in your own regret.
because im not here to mess around,
i wont forgive and forget.

ive seen you in your truest person,
the one thats really up to par.
and i can tell that you are cruel,
but very good at what you are.

just remember it was your own fault,
as you keep my thought close by.
because no matter how old you will grow,
i will always be in mind.

[This message has been edited by Clockwork_Orange (06-04-2007 09:27 PM).]

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

1 posted 2007-06-04 11:43 PM

Wow... I really like this... I'm not sure which one's my favorite part. Really, really excellent!

I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2007-06-06 02:58 PM

Wow I can't believe I missed this I really really loved this CO. amazing

hope to read more soon.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

3 posted 2007-06-10 10:55 PM

that was pretty great i can relate to some of that poem and it was crazy i liked the end the best the part where you said that you would always be in mind that was a great poem

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

4 posted 2007-06-20 06:32 PM

isn't that what life is- just one heart break after another. it makes me question whether any of us are good at all or if we are just a bunch of vicious beings bent on hurting all around us. you make me think- tht'as why i like your stuff the best.

-Red

Inigo Montoya: You seem a decent fellow. I hate to kill you.
Westley: You seem a decent fellow. I hate to die.

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