im not you.( the song im working on)

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Teen Poetry #8

im not you.( the song im working on)

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2007-05-13 09:44 AM

verse one:

this pencil meets the paper
as i scribble my last lines.
i tryed my best to fix this mess,
im being killed for what defines.
i hang my head at the steeple doors,
to say im sorry for what ive done.
but i cant change who i am,
i cant change who ive become.

brige:

dont tell me how to live my life
if cant walk and fill my shoes.
dont you dare meet my stare
and tell me i should be more like you.

chorus:

im so sorry, im not who you wished for.
i did my best and let you down.
i cant say i didnt try, because i ripped my heart and bled it dry.
i kicked and screamed in agony as i seen my life played out for me.

reapeat brige 2x
reapeat chorus 4x

[This message has been edited by Clockwork_Orange (05-14-2007 06:19 PM).]

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

1 posted 2007-05-15 07:45 AM

I liked it for the most part keep writing i can't wait to see even more from you

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

2 posted 2007-05-15 03:47 PM

I like this alot , what music would you have it be to?

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2007-05-16 12:06 PM

je t'adore. extraordinaire. très bien poème. anyway so my french isn't as good as yours but i still have a few years anyway

can't belive I missed this, I really liked it.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

4 posted 2007-05-17 09:22 PM

well j'tadore means i love you...but thats ok.
and its a rock song. i was born and raised rock and thats how ill be to the day i draw my last breath.

ps. I LOVE ALEXI VLHAIHO(guitarist from Children Of Bodom)

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