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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Born in fire, created by the darkness Plunged in the icy depths, lit up by golden light Fed by greatness, glory, shadow and pain Over possession of, an eternal fight Forged deep within the core of the earth Brought above the greatest heights What a day to behold the grand birth Of our people of Humans. Shaped by great creators Molded by the world Pulled by opposite forces Trying to even out a balance A work of art Pandora’s box Can go both ways We have free will Opened up a different story We shape our own fates Changing constantly our destinies Started a work in progress It was the greatest mistake Yet the most unique gift To form our species Things are no longer in iron control An experiment of all the Gods, Goddesses, spirits, deities A trial of new growth that cannot be taken back You started a whole new beginning with Humans. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
A work of art Pandora’s box Can go both ways We have free will i really liked this stanza good post tx for sharing... hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
"A work of art Pandora’s box Can go both ways We have free will" I really liked this part, and I like all the description you used in the first stanza. Nice job!  ~Alli~ |
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pencil&paper Member
since 2006-09-09
Posts 76asleep somewhere in my head |
GREAT poem i mean really GREAT so do you want to know what my favorite lines are? well here they are: Born in fire, created by the darkness Plunged in the icy depths, lit up by golden light Fed by greatness, glory, shadow and pain Over possession of, an eternal fight Forged deep within the core of the earth Brought above the greatest heights What a day to behold the grand birth Of our people of Humans. Shaped by great creators Molded by the world Pulled by opposite forces Trying to even out a balance A work of art Pandora’s box Can go both ways We have free will Opened up a different story We shape our own fates Changing constantly our destinies Started a work in progress It was the greatest mistake Yet the most unique gift To form our species Things are no longer in iron control An experiment of all the Gods, Goddesses, spirits, deities A trial of new growth that cannot be taken back You started a whole new beginning with Humans. thats right i liked the whole thing  sorry i'm a little hyper "Those who danced were thought to be quite insane by those who could not hear the music."~Angela Monet |
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vexx Junior Member
since 2007-04-20
Posts 14denmark/bornholm |
intaresting things us humans and intaresting writing...im no good at critiques so i'll just say liked it, it holds things to think about |
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MixedChica Junior Member
since 2006-11-10
Posts 34 |
Rhia this is amazing. so powerful and passionate. I miss you girlie |
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stormdancer Junior Member
since 2007-05-10
Posts 31state of confustion |
This is interesting. Sings of ledgends. I like what i've read of you. If you want to you can check out some of mine...? I'd like to hear your opinion rhia |
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