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my individuality |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513
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Individuality Is something I love Individuality Is something you should love Don’t ask me why I know you don’t care Don’t ask me why My secrets I’ll never share I’m closing myself off To everyone who hurts me The rumors that they spread The rumors that cut my soul But there is a fire There is a fire Burning in my heart You can see if you look close enough In my eyes you see sadness But my friends- they see stillness Peace of heart and mind and soul And then you cut me down I’m burning, bleeding on the floor Why won’t you stop This torment This pain that you’ve caused? Could you please tell me what’s wrong With my individuality…….? |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
this was really good it read more like a song or atleast when i was reading it thats how i pictured it i really liked it how its about individuality good job |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
My secrets I’ll never share it would flow better if it was my secrets can't be shared Also this was a bit rough, and read rough. I think if this makes sense that you could try and describe it more simply? it would be nice to see something so complicated made simple . |
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