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Teen Poetry #8

Can't live without you

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

0 posted 2007-04-24 12:42 PM

I can't think of one damn thing to say,
That would change what happened yesterday,
I lie awake wishing you'd call,
Watching my wish ricochet off the wall,

I don't know how bad it is, I can't tell,
Now i'm beside myself inside this hell,
I just can't get you out of my head,
All that you did all you said,

I know I'm overreacting a bit,
But I'm left alone in a bottomless pit,
I see your face everytime my eyes close,
I can't live without you and part of me knows.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Huggz_N_Kissez3532
New Member

since 2007-04-26

Posts 1
Wichita, Ks

1 posted 2007-04-26 10:45 AM

This is a really good poem! i can relate to it. i hope to read more of ur poems.

Love Alwayz Me,
Amanda!!

vexx
Junior Member

since 2007-04-20

Posts 14
denmark/bornholm

2 posted 2007-04-26 02:42 PM

it speaks so beautifully clear about something i think most pepoel have felt i liked that in it

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

3 posted 2007-04-26 09:26 PM

i could relate to it in a sense my experience was a bit different from what i think you are writing but i like when an author can get others to relate to their poems so this was a really good job i liked it

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2007-04-30 12:26 PM

thank you all for your relplies

hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

5 posted 2007-05-07 11:28 AM

Wow hunnie.. it knocked me down :]
love it:]]

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