Teen Poetry #8 |
Hidng Their Wings |
WaterFairy103 Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196 |
You turn on the TV, snuggle up with your cat, When a little girl comes on, wearing a baseball cap. Saying, “I have cancer, and we need your help.” Don’t assume they’re talking to someone else. ‘Cause in another year, you may come to find, Everyone assumed, and that little girl died. Don’t turn your head and look the other way, ‘Cause the truth is that you’ll find someday, That the people who needed all those little things, Are really just angels hiding their wings. A neighbor of yours goes to teach her classes, And you notice she’s wearing big, dark sunglasses. Everyone hears her cries late at night, But they all go to bed and turn out the light. It’s so much more than a black eye, a bruise, Is anyone going to stop the abuse? Don’t turn your head and look away, ‘Cause the truth is that you’ll find someday, That the people who needed all those little things, Are really just angels hiding their wings. Giving ten dollars to that little girl, Asking the neighbor if all’s right in her world, It’s little things that changes fates, That let us earn our place at Heaven’s gates. So don’t turn your head and look away, Because the truth is that you’ll find someday, That the people who needed all those little things, Are really just angels hiding their wings. I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Wow... Umm, it's a good poem, I mean really good, but it kind of reminds me of Tommy Shane Steiner's song - "What If She's An Angel", maybe that's just me. Thanks for sharing, it was an enjoyable piece "The rising morning can't insure that we shall end the day; For death stands ready at the door to snatch our lives away" |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
This is like really amazing.. it actually made me cry.. I have never heard of that song Stargal but no matter what the inspiration this is truly amazing |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
I really like this. Thats a neat idea about these people being angles hiding their wings. We should all not just look away, we should care. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
This was an absolutly beautiful poem I thought it was absolutly true in all ways... hunnie ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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Free_Spirit07 Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 222The middle of my mind! |
Really really liked this! But I saw this one line 'It’s little things that changes fates,' I think it's just meant to be fate....I don't know though! Hehe Nice work keep it up. x0x0 |
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vexx Junior Member
since 2007-04-20
Posts 14denmark/bornholm |
beautiful poem speaking with the heart in a way that shut be thought carefully upon...nice rythm too breaks a littel in So don?t turn your head and look away, Because the truth is that you?ll find someday, That the people who needed all those little things, Are really just angels hiding their wings. but else it follows all the way throug...loved it keep going |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
this is really amazing i loved how you mentioned that they were really angel's hiding their wings it was very touching i loved it and can't wait to hear more from you |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
well written, deep though, really good! I agree with almost everything. haha cuz works deff do NOT get you into heaven, but other than that i agree with everything and i think this was a really really really good poem. first stanza was most deff my favorite! |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
this is amazing. the only thing i disagree with is the part that you earn your way to Heavens gates, haha.. because i believe in faith and not works but thats a totally different thing isnt it.. geesh here i go again this is really an amazing poem though, most definetely one of my favorites.. EVER! bravo:] ~missy |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
okay and i definetely just said what bekah did.. hahaha im so stupid. |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
btw, can i turn this into a song pleease:} ?? |
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stormdancer Junior Member
since 2007-05-10
Posts 31state of confustion |
Very good. The message is loud and clear. Ditto to what Beckah said though. No offence to you or your beliefs, or your poem. |
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Shake Junior Member
since 2006-11-17
Posts 40 |
..........Wow........ That was great.........it reminded me of a song Ive heard a while back....forgot the name.... 9/10 "When the rich wage war,it's the poor that die."-- |
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